Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Lived experience in mental health professionals

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Fantastic - you've contributed across three different platforms Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population. For example, the detail of Table 2 is probably too local to Australia to be of much interest to an international audience, especially as it doesn't mention lived experience directly. Overview - Abbreviate to include: a description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Use APA style citations to peer-reviewed sources, with the references listed in the References section For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words I like the direct and applied focus Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Currently there is an overreliance on links to non-academic sources. However, key non-academic sources can be included in the External links section. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Excellent use of examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): under way what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure Excellent Caption uses APA style Caption should include Figure X. ... Captions could better address an international audience Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources See also Excellent External links have been moved to the External links section External links Excellent The Australia-specific links should be reviewed and probably removed - consider replacing with international equivalents

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:56, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

Comprehensive tips

Ok! Great topic, wow! I would never have even considered this on a day-to-day level, which is why I think choosing this is fab. Some basic tips and tricks for you!

1. Love the third figure, the first two are pretty basic, BUT I appreciate that this is a really hard topic to find wiki-approved pictures for.
2. While I love a good table, think about the reader. Consider all the times in lectures or textbooks where you are expected to read multiple tables...I pretty much never do because they are a) unengaging and b) APA tables are always full of info that is mathematical so i tend to skip. While the table here is relevant, i personally think you will earn marks for leaving it out or at least making it more aesthetically pleasing than leaving it as is. Perhaps consider leaving one and presenting the other differently? -> Not a major criticism as much as I just want you to make the most of the marking criteria!
3. The way you have set up your headings seems odd...not sure what Dr Neil said in the comments for the 5% topic development, but I would consider making most of those as either a) BIG headings and b) Those which can be under headings as smaller subheadings.

--> See other pages which got good marks OR see the chapter below: https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2021/Indigenous_Australian_well-being

Overall a great draft. I do appreciate the timeline table is comprehensive and necessary but consider a visual timeline which is shorter and then maybe some supplementary events in writing underneath...? Have a good rest of the term :)

RE: Use of Peer workers & Peer leaders in Personality Disorder treatment

Hey Kim!

I've written a little bit in the discussion page on UCLearn, but here are three journal articles that discuss the efficacy of using peer workers in the models for treatment of Borderline Personality Disorder. You might find them helpful/interesting to use as another small case study, or to integrate into the "Lived experience workforce in mental health system" or "Lived experience and mental health professionals" section? I know it may seem niche, but use of lived experience peer workers and peer leaders in BPD treatment have really strong efficacy, and moving forward, they will be further integrated into health service systems and treatment for all sorts of mental health issues. In my research with Project Air Strategy I worked on a research paper discussing the effectiveness of suicide prevention programs and modelling across Australia and most of the suicide programs (eg. The Way Back, Next Steps, SPOT/ SafeHaven, HOPE program) used peer support workers at the core of their treatment. Please ask my anything about this topic because I spent WEEKS doing research on it.

Barr, K. R., Townsend, M. L., & Grenyer, B. F. S. (2020). Using peer workers with lived experience to support the treatment of borderline personality disorder: A qualitative study of consumer, carer and clinician perspectives. Borderline Personality Disorder and Emotion Dysregulation, 7(1), 20. https://doi.org/10.1186/s40479-020-00135-5

Courey, L., Hyndman, D., Sheasgreen, C., & McCay, E. (2021). What we know — and want to know — about Family Connections: A review from the perspective of lived experience. Current Opinion in Psychology, 37, 44–48. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.copsyc.2020.07.029

Ng, F., Townsend, M. L., Jewell, M., Marceau, E. M., & Grenyer, B. F. S. (2020). Priorities for service improvement in personality disorder in Australia: Perspectives of consumers, carers and clinicians. Personality and Mental Health, 14(4), 350–360. https://doi.org/10.1002/pmh.1485

--u3197931 (discuss • contribs) 00:55, 9 October 2021 (UTC)

Cheers for the info, I shall take a look! :) U3194822 (discuss • contribs) 06:18, 14 December 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Overview This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest . Consider adding an opening slide with the title and sub-title to help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A context for the topic is established. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s). Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. The presentation is well polished. Audio recording quality was very good. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides, with text and images. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data Use the correct chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation so that it fits within the 100 character limit) to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:11, 21 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Explains the problem or phenomenon. Reasonably good focus question(s). Ideally, provide open-ended, rather than closed-ended focus questions. Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image. Theory — Breadth Relevant applied theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Mental health). Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Good critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Ideally, present in paragraph format. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent. APA style Replace double spaces with single spaces. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures Figures are very well captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: A comma is only needed after "et al." when used in parentheses (e.g., (King et al., 2020) or King et al. (2020), but not King et al., (2020)). References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). No use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Good use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:06, 24 November 2021 (UTC)