Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Laziness

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Hello!

your chapter is looking really well planned! Internally linking key terms within the body of the text would be a great addition to this chapter, it could be really useful to your readers wanting to know more. --Brianna Meddemmen (discuss • contribs) 08:50, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

HI there, well done on your chapter it is looking really good, and very well planned out - I found the take home message of laziness being able to be cured - really interested and this should be further explored through your page! Great work!! U3144808 - 16/10/21 - 10.26pm

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Title Excellent User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Headings Excellent Key points Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings. Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study Good balance of theory and research. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Write using 3rd person perspective. Conclusion (the most important section): promising focus on practical, take-home messages Figure A figure is presented. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Unclear how this figure relates to the main text. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view. References Excellent For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation remove "Retrieved from" Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:46, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Overview of your chapter

Hey, I like this topic, and actually found myself reading it for fun, rather than an edit, but I will leave some advice anyways. --> Note: I know this is a draft and not done, but any advice is good!

1. I would consider using FAR MORE intext links to either Wikiversity pages, Wikipedia, or other websites. You will get more marks for that.
2. I would make it more interesting with better case studies. You could do one where it is the same person throughout or multiple different people experiencing different types of laziness. EG.

Case 1: "Sam lives at home with her parents. He studies health and works (partime) at the bakery. Sam has no expenses other than his car, so he has a lot of free time to do his degree because he doesn't have to work. Although, Sam finds himself spending up to 5 hrs scrolling on IG. He says he wants to study and knows he needs to, but can't be bothered to leave his bed. His mum says he is 'lazy' and was as a child but it has gotten worse since lockdown and with age. -> You could then keep up with Sam through 2-3 more cases or switch to another person. Case studies can also be entirely factual, and based on actual chronic laziness or cases where people have legitimately died of laziness or experienced health issues because of it...

1. Also, add some coloured pictures and more boxes here and there. It makes hard literature, research or 'boring' content easier to read. If you like, go back to those student chapters who have done well in the past, go to source editing, and use their colourful and interactive templates!

1. Finally, make sure you cite any claims you make. I saw a few which were questionably factual. I am sure they are right but provide a citation.

Happy writing!

Hey! as someone who procrastinates quite a bit, this topic is pretty interesting to me, you seem to have covered the topic quite well already but an interesting topic that you could expand on is laziness outside of human behaviour. This article explores laziness in animals, a really interesting read! https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/BF00349198 --U3202984 (discuss • contribs) 12:02, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Over the maximum word count. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Reasonable Overview. The Overview is quite general. Consider developing focus questions (more specific than learning outcomes) to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Avoid being too focused on definitional aspects - this is the least important/interesting. More interesting is theory, research, and practice. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Good critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Basic summary. Add practical, take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar Use serial commas[2] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Biopsychosocial -> biopsychosocial). APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~6 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:42, 8 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. The presentation is under the maximum time limit. Overview An opening slide with the sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also include the title. This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Focus questions are presented (in the form of the sub-title). Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is well paced. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is a little hesitant in places - maybe could benefit from further practice. Audio recording quality was OK. Audio quality/volume seems to vary somewhat between slides. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes good use of animated slides, with text and images. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The presentation is well produced. Meta-data The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. No written description of the presentation is provided. A link to the mobile version of the book chapter is provided. It is better to link to the desktop version. Those on a mobile device will be automatically shown the mobile version. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:26, 20 November 2021 (UTC)