Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Initiative

Research article

I found this article that may help guide your research. https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/abs/pii/S0191308501230056 --U3201217 (discuss • contribs) 08:51, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title Title - correct Subtitle - was incorrect (have fixed) Author details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created - minimal Consider expanding description about self Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Headings Under-developed, mostly consisting of uncustomised template headings. Key points Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Expand theory and research. Limited development of key points for some sections Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Cite each reference at least once in the main text. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? Figure A figure is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view. References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:16, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Feedback and suggestions

Hi there,

I enjoyed reading your chapter and seeing the work you've put in. Given you've got all your sections written up, I feel like suggestions on presentation may help you out in the final stretch.

1. You're probably aware of this already, but just a friendly reminder that at the time of this feedback (35 hours until submission) you're over the allotted word count. It might be simple to remove 200 words, but then you need to factor in case studies and other non-information aspects that improve the readability of your chapter. Are there sections that can be cut down, or if really needed, removed entirely?

2. You will need some learning features, whether they be case studies or scenarios, or something else. In your chapter, natural points to put learning features in appear to be at the end of your theory sections, so people have some examples to apply your theory analysis towards. I'm sure you'll have other ideas as well.

3. There are some sections that read for too long and need to be split. For example, the 'Personal Initiative' section is currently one single paragraph, and it's very long. You'd need to cut it down into small, succinct paragraphs to make it easy to read. It doesn't read like you need to modify sentences or such, but there are points that stand out where paragraph breaks can be made (e.g. where the sections starts talking about other examples of PI).

4. Images representing 'initiative' might be tricky, but depending on symbolism you might be able to find images of things that represent initiative. As an example, you could use this creative commons image: https://search.creativecommons.org/photos/6bca9f1b-b58c-4f2c-9c29-48a2be5070f7

5. There's a reminder on your main page already, but don't forget to alphabetise your reference list, external links, and 'See also' section.

Hopefully these help you out in some small way.

--U3020459 (discuss • contribs) 10:31, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi, thanks for the feedback, I added more images and a quiz at the end, I also made some of paragraphs less clumped like you suggested. Thanks for the advice :) U3203031 (discuss • contribs) 10:34, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. The presentation is under the maximum time limit. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A context for the topic is established. Focus questions are presented (in the form of the sub-title). Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s). Audio The audio is somewhat hard to follow because so much content is presented so quickly. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is a little hesitant in some places - perhas could benefit from further practice. Audio recording quality was very good. Sniffs are little distracting. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it reasonably easy to read and listen at the same time. The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is basically supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. The use of the webcam neither adds or substracts significantly from the visual quality. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:58, 20 November 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:07, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview The Overview is underdeveloped. Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. This chapter focuses on initiative in the workplace, rather than initiative as a more general concept. The workplace could well be used as a significant focus, but there should be more attempt to discuss the concept more broadly. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is reasonably well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[2] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and correct use of that vs. who. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures Figures are captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. No use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution No logged social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:07, 22 November 2021 (UTC)