Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Goal-framing theory and pro-environmental behaviour

Topic development feedback

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Title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Link provided to book chapter and e-portfolio Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Headings Excellent Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Consider abbreviating to PEB in the headings to make them shorter. Or leaving PEB of some to shorten e.g., if top-level heading refers to PEB, then sub-headings probably don't need to repeat it. Key points Excellent My main suggestion is that this topic lends itself to being able to use lots of examples to illustrate the application of theoretical concepts. Consider using one or more tables to summarise some of the information. Direct quotes should have page numbers (APA style). Overview - Consider adding: focus questions an image an example or case study Note to avoid providing too much background information about GFT and PEB as separate constructs. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. In this respect, the most important sections of the proposed chapter are parts 4 and 5. Use Australian/British spelling e.g., conceptualized -> conceptualised Good to see some consideration of critical/alternative views For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings. Conclusion (the most important section): great to see the focus on take-home, practical messages Figure Excellent Caption uses APA style. explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. consider also using images which illustrate solutions in action. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. References Excellent Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:16, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Social contributions

Wow! This chapter was so interesting to read. This comment isnt for my social contributions but tis is so well done and was so fascinating to read I had to let you know! congrats on such a good chapter :). I did some final copy editing and fixed some common mistakes and spelling errors, (you accidently spelt great intead on Greta). U3203008 (discuss • contribs)

Oh that is so nice of you! Thank you so much for your comment and your edits, I really appreciate it. All the best with your book chapter and studies in general!:) --U3196787 (discuss • contribs) 11:38, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clear focus question(s). Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Whilst the normative goal frame could be the most powerful, is there also the risk/problem that it can be the hardest to shift? Key citations are well used. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Research — Critical thinking Critical thinking about research is good. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Well developed. Clear take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Abbreviations Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., GFT/PEB), use it consistently. Don't set up an abbreviation and then not use it or only use it sometimes. Spelling is excellent. Proofreading is excellent. APA style is excellent. Figures and tables Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1). Figures are well captioned. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. References use very good APA style. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s). This image has been uploaded and claimed as your own work - but I suspect that it isn't - where is it from? Who owns the copyright? etc. Very good use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~27 logged, useful, mostly minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:48, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Overview An opening slide with the sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s). Audio The audio is interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Very good intonation engages listener interest. Audio recording quality was excellent. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:15, 16 November 2021 (UTC)