Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Fulfilling potential

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter (consider renaming) Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Love that you've created and uploaded this diagram. The image is probably more useful if uploaded in .png, .svg, .jpg format than .pdf - .svg is ideal, but .png is probably the easiest to generate. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the 2nd level structure Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations, except the Conclusion Reeve (2018) is not a great reference because it is a secondary source. Instead, follow the key citations from Reeve to access original sources and utilise these. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info For APA style, multiple citations should be alphabetical order. Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Two level hierarchy - perhaps also consider Alderfer's ERG model Perhaps also consider Roger's organismic valuing process Maybe take a look at life goals: https://scholar.google.com/scholar?q=life+goals Overview - Consider: abbreviating (some content can be moved into subsequent sections) providing a description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Good balance of theory and research Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Given Figure 2, I don't think the chapter needs Figure 1. Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider adjusting image size References Very good Hanging indent added For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation spacing between author initials Resources See also Very good Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Provide links to external sites here (apologies there was an error in the template) - links provided have been moved to See also

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:37, 11 September 2021 (UTC)

Student comments

Hey. How are you? It looks like you are in the preliminary stages here, so I won't pick at this too much but consider: a) Using far more in-text links to alternative websites or wiki b) Consider how you are using your citations: are they recent/relevant and are there enough? For this task, you might need upwards of 20 citations to support your claims c) Not much use of colour. Colour is used to engage the reader. You will lose marks if you don't use colour. Check out my chapter for an example. d) I do really like the use of the two pictures, at first I wondered why you have used it twice, but upon further reading, it seems relevant. e) Add a conclusion! Also make sure the overview is short and sharp with a box for 'key learnings' Good luck

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Build more strongly on other self-actualisation-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self-actualisation. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is reviewed. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Good critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are summarised. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Clear take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Check and correct APA style formatting for direct quotes. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Figure captions use the correct format. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al."). References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~1 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence. A .png file would be preferable to a .pdf for an uploaded image.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:51, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was very good. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are clearly communicated. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:12, 16 November 2021 (UTC)