Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Frustration of basic psychological needs

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Hi! Your book chapter is looking great so far! I think your book chapter would really benefit from including some case studies to strength the ideas conveyed in your work. For example, including a case study about autonomy- A child is living out of home for the first time, after settling in she went grocery shopping for the first time and felt a great sense of achievement and happiness. This is an example of autonomy. Hope this helps --Anna u3200574 (discuss • contribs) 09:15, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi Lynn, I managed to find the diagram on coroporal punishment in the Reeve (2018) textbook, however upon attempting to upload it for you, I realised that copying the figure into this location would be a breach of the author's copyright. Thus, I have removed the footnote you included for it. --U3204330 (discuss • contribs) 15:29, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Added key point

Hi Lynn, I've also added a key point regarding the use of physical punishment on children. I found some evidence in research by Hyland et al. (2012) that suggested children who were punished physically may have been at a higher risk of cancer, cardiac disease and asthma as a result. I've attached the paper to your bibliography too. --U3204330 (discuss • contribs) 15:47, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Headings Excellent Basic, 1-level heading structure Focused on the topic Could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure e.g., consider sub-sections for: Autonomy frustration Relatedness frustration Competence frustration Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an example or case study Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Perhaps also consider the literature about daily hassles and uplifts. Good balance of theory and research. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Excellent use of examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Excellent Caption uses APA style. Caption should include Figure X. ... Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources None provided

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Overall Overall, this is chapter chapter provides a solid overview of the psychology of frustration of BPNs. For additional feedback, see the following comments and [ these copyedits]. Overview A basic Overview is provided. Consider: Explaining the problem or phenomenon in more detail. Adding a case study or example to help engage reader interest. Developing focus questions to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Theory — Breadth A good explanation of frustration in the context of BPNs is provided. However, this is not true: "A well-known sub-theory of SDT is Maslow's hierarchy of needs (Figure 2)", so coverage of the Maslow hierarchy isn't really needed, especially as the theory isn't well supported by research. What might be more relevant here is the distinction between deficiency and growth needs. Several useful examples are provided. Theory — Depth Reasonable depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used, particularly Vansteenkiste, Deci, Ryan, and Reeve. Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is cited, but could be explained in more depth. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Critical thinking about research is reasonable. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships suggesting specific directions for future research Integration The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory. Conclusion The Conclusion offers a good summary. Consider: Reminding the reader about the problem or phenomenon of interest. Adding practical, take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References use very good, almost correct APA style: Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Check for small typos/inconsistencies Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s). Increase the size of some images to make them easier to read. Good use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Good use of reflection questions. Good use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~12 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:28, 3 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent/very good/reasonably good/basic presentation. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it presents too much content visually and auditorily. The presentation is under the maximum time limit. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The importance of this topic is explained. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Focus questions are presented. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with good take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow, and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was good. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., mouse clicks are audible). Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. Most of the font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are very well communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:40, 16 November 2021 (UTC)