Hi. I really like your topic so far! You've got a lot of detail and good references.— Preceding unsigned comment added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]])
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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Social contributions should be made either directly to chapters or comments add to chapter discussion pages.
Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Overview and Conclusion not developed - these are arguably the most important sections.
For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings.
Caption should include Figure X. (italicised and with period)
These figures are probably overly complex for this chapter. If they are to be used, increase the size to make them more easily viewable and make a clearer connection with the main text.
Move external links into the External links section
Note my sense in reviewing this topic development is that you may not have been engaging in tutorials? Just a hunch. If this is the case, I recommend tutorials to support with skills and advice for the major project.
-- Jtneill - Talk - c13:01, 2 September 2021 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
Some statements could be explained more clearly (e.g., see the [awkward expression?] tags).
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
Reduce use of weasel words (e.g., "it is considered", "known to be", "scholars") which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning.
Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. "profound") in science-based communication.
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
Layout
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2].
Spelling
Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., War).
Replace double spaces with single spaces.
APA style
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
No written description of the presentation is provided.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
Links to and from the book chapter are provided.
The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. This introduces limitations, such as being unable to add the presentation to a playlist. More info.
Some of the image sources are communicated; some are missing.
The copyright status of images are not communicated. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation.
A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.