Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Employee assistance programs

Topic development feedback

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Title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Headings Excellent Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Key points Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem an example or case study For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings. I love the applied, practical focus - keep this. There also looks to be a good emphasis on research. Expand coverage of theory. Key points are well developed for most sections, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation Resources See also Very good Use internal link style for Wikipedia articles - fixed External links None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:28, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Thoughts and suggestions

Hi there,

This chapter is shaping up to be very fascinating to read, and the work you're putting in shows. At this stage I won't have any feedback related to the material specifically, but I've spotted a few things to be aware of.

1. The reference list can only contain scientific sources, so that Safe Work Australia reference will need to come out. It looks like you only cite it in the overview, but you also have a previous sentence with a direct link to a Safe Work Australia site. Perhaps you can merge the sentences together so you can remove the reference?

2. Would it be worth considering moving the 'Case study outcome' to the conclusion section, right above your written material? That way, it can be separated away from the section 3 quiz.

3. Reading the chapter, whenever you reference a study you write the sentence in the passive tense (e.g. A recent study has found that enhancing emotional intelligence can decrease the intensity and frequency of negative emotions (Sun et al., 2021)). Writing these in active tense would strengthen these citations and improve reading (e.g. Sun and (his/her/their) colleagues (2021) found that enhancing emotional intelligence can decrease the intensity and frequency of negative emotions.)

4. Don't forget to link to Figure 1 somewhere in your text. Figures 2 and 3 have in-text markers so they're fine.

Hope these help!

--U3020459 (discuss • contribs) 11:39, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that successfully overviews EAPs in the context of emotion and mental health. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clear focus question(s). Theory — Breadth Good coverage of relevant theory. More perhaps could be said about what intervention methods are used by EAPs. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Reasonable depth is provided. COVID-19 could be used as an example or case study, but avoid locating the chapter too specifically in 2020-2021 - aim for time permanence. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory. Conclusion Solid conclusion. Consider adding practical, take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations use correct APA style. References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~12 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:51, 4 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Overview An opening slide is presented but the full sub-title is not presented or narrated. with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions (i.e., the sub-title questinos) that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the first two parts of the topic, but not the last part (about EAP effectiveness). An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s). Audio The audio is interesting to listen to. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Audio recording quality was excellent. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:51, 16 November 2021 (UTC)