Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Emotional eating

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, particularly to develop the 2nd level headings Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider adding: emotion eating - description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Eating disorders are relevant but not central to the topic - there are many people who eat emotionally who don't have an eating disorder. So, eating disorders could provide an interesting, if somewhat extreme, example of how emotional eating can get out of hand. Perhaps consider the distinction between regulated eating and unregulated eating. Perhaps also consider alternative strategies for emotional self-regulation (e.g., exercise). Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider embedding more links to related book chapters about eating. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Well done on uploading and embedding an image Check correct capitalisation - the image can be reuploaded to correct Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Excellent External links Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:01, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented. Also narrated the title and sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion An audio Conclusion provides some basic take-home messages. Add a Conclusion slide take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was very good. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Meta-data The full chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:49, 20 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Well under the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. Explain the problem or phenomenon in more detail. Clear focus question(s). Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image. Theory — Breadth Relevant theory is reasonably well explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Build more strongly on other eating-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Eating). Theory — Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are summarised. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Layout The chapter is well structured. Grammar Use serial commas[2] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Replace double spaces with single spaces. Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Figure captions use the correct format. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Tables Table captions should use APA style. See example. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent/very good/good/basic/insufficient. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good/Basic use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Good use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution No logged social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:17, 23 November 2021 (UTC)