Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Developmental changes in emotion regulation

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Headings Logical, 1-level heading structure. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Excellent References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation Resources See also Excellent External links Move academic sources into the References section

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:27, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Hey there, just fixed a typo and added some hyperlinks to help out, your book chapter looks awesome! [[User:U3187208|U3187208--U3187208 (discuss • contribs) 01:21, 17 October 2021 (UTC)]]

Thanks so much! U3187813 (discuss • contribs) 11:40, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Consider introducing a case study or example to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Excellent depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Research — Critical thinking Excellent critical thinking about research is evident. Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Check and correct when to use "that is" (i.e.) and when to use "for example" (e.g.). APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Figures and tables APA style is used for Figure captions. Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Figures are very well captioned. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). No use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Social contribution ~11 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:48, 10 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The sub-title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The importance of this topic is explained. Focus questions are presented. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s). Audio The audio is interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is very well produced. Meta-data The chapter title is used in the name of the presentation - also try to include a version of the sub-title to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Possibly the images come from PowToon, but this isn't explicitly indicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:25, 16 November 2021 (UTC)