Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Crowds and emotion

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Hey there, I noticed you have a section talking about ensemble coding; here is an external link I found helpful in explaining this process https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8of0bX4T_vo - Ensemble Coding Explained in Plain English (youKnowMoreJoJo). --Ashley Sanders01 (discuss • contribs) 05:23, 23 August 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi U3199141. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:48, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

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Title Excellent User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Headings Topic choices for the headings is generally good, but can be further developed. Overly complicated 4-level structure - consider simplifying. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Focus questions are well targetted For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings. Appears to be a good balance of theory and research. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Conclusion (the most important section): some ideas, but under developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented. Caption uses APA style. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Unclear how this image relates to the topic - make the connection more clear in the caption. References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources See also Excellent Very good Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant book chapters Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Excellent Very good Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:48, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem. The main areas for potential improvement are to provide a more indepth review of research and more proofreading to improve the quality of written expression. This chapter is well under/over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Excellent examples. Clear focus question(s). Some minor aspects written expression could be improved. Theory — Breadth Relevant theory is well selected and reasonably well described and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used, although there seems to be a heavy reliance on Sullivan (2018). Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Providing more background about the examples could help the reader to understand. Research — Key findings Some relevant research is reviewed. The chapter could be strengthened by providing a more indepth review of relevant research. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Critical thinking about research is basic. Critical thinking about research could be evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Conclusion A reasonable summary is provided. Add practical, take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK, but several sentences are not grammatically correct. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[2] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard e.g., Remove unnecessary capitalisation. Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters (e.g., emotional contagion). Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Good use of case studies or examples. Some more explanation of the examples would be helpful (e.g., Białystok). Social contribution ~1 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:30, 1 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is sometimes a little hesitant - could benefit from being more confident. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is good. The presentation makes good use of animated slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Presumably the images are from PowToon but this is not explicitly acknowledged. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:01, 15 November 2021 (UTC)