Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Criminal profiling

Heading casing

Hi U3204463. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:58, 24 August 2021 (UTC)

Hey! I just made some spelling and grammar changes to your paper, looks great. I was wondering if racial profiling would be relevant to your paper? Goodluck [[1]] 13/10/2021 4:15 (UTC)

Comments

Hi, the topic you have chosen is extremely interesting, it immediately caught my attention. The key points you have so far look great and are well thought out. I'm wondering if you have seen the show Criminal Minds?, it's all about criminal profiling and can give you great insight about your topic! --U3199141 (discuss • contribs) 04:53, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Splitting Glossary and End of chapter Quiz

Hello! I just finished going through your chapter and it is looking so interesting. I do have a very minor formatting suggestion but I think the layout of your chapter would flow better if the quiz and the glossary were separate. It will help the visual progression through your chapter. I also added an external link to a Podcast called Real Crime Profile. I think this could provide further details around the practical side of profiling as the podcast included multiple cases of a behavioural analyst profiling real crime cases. Hope this helps :) --U3203008 (discuss • contribs) 13:07, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

From U3187741: Hi, I really like your topic so far! I believe this article might be useful in expanding your key findings and limitations section!

Comments

Hi! I really enjoyed reading your chapter just now, I have a ted talk for you that could help you out! :) https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u2V0vOFexY4

Feedback

Hi there!

Great start on your book chapter, and all the best as you keep chipping away at it! I do have a couple of pointers that I hope are helpful as you keep writing. Firstly, I know it's still in the early stages of drafting, but it is important to use a consistent style of referencing. If you do choose to go with the wikipedia referencing, footnotes go after a full stop like this.^[1] Here is a link to the wikipedia guide: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Citing_sources#Footnotes . Secondly, you might want to consider focussing on the question to remove unnecessary words. It is an application question, and as such, you might consider practical aspects of criminal profiling. Although this is a relatively old article, it might be helpful: https://doi.org/10.1002/bsl.2370040405 . Finally, I was a bit confused about the image in the first paragraph. Isn't criminal profiling concerned with behaviour rather than appearance? The image seems to suggest that it involves appearance of the offender too.

I hope these points help, and you have a rewarding end to the semester!

U3202904 (discuss • contribs) 07:58, 14 October 2021 (UTC)

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Title Excellent User page Basic, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Headings Promising heading structure because the headings are directly related to the central topic. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Use default heading formatting (e.g., avoid bold, italics, underline etc.). Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Remove colons at the end of headings. Key findings and implications + Further research and improvements - probably these sections could be covered by previous sections and/or the Conclusion section instead. Key points Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words. Use double-quotation marks for direct quotes less than 40 words. Even better, write in your own words. Avoid overuse of italics. Instead of a glossary, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Several of these are already provided - well done. Overview clearly outlines the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings. Unclear how the FAE and CD relate to criminal profiling - are these the most relevant psychological theories?? Avoid having a long quiz at the end - it is better to instead have one or two questions at the end of each major section to test whether readers have understood the take-home message from each section. Conclusion (the most important section): partially developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented. Caption should include Figure X. (period rather than colon) Expand caption to explain how it illustrates motivational theory being applied to criminal profiling. References Very good Check consistency of formatting. Resources See also OK Rename links and use sentence casing (I've done the first one) External links Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:23, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Quick note

Hey, I'd just like to say that you've put in some great effort into your topic! It can be a pretty precarious one but you've handled it quite well. I also found it rather interesting. As a previous suggestion mentioned, when using footnotes, make sure punctuation is before the reference (e.g., 'criminality.[1]'). I've made that mistake too. I've taken the liberty of fixing three of the ones I could see for you. Best of luck with it, and the rest of your units this semester --Robert.E.House (discuss • contribs) 10:53, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a promising, solid that uses psychological theory, but not much research, to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Over the maximum word count. More selectivity about what to include is needed. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Explains the problem or phenomenon. Reasonably clear focus question(s). I adjusted the first question. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth A useful range of theories are considered. Reduce the amount of theoretical content so that the chapter is within the maximum word count and to give more room for focusing on reviewing research. For example, the material about motivated reasoning, whilst interesting, it not about profiling of criminals per se, but rather a potential bias for investigators to try to avoid. Consider presenting the CP techniques first, followed by the theory. This might help a reader to understand the topic. Theory — Depth Overall, there is too much depth about the selected theory(ies). Either select fewer theories or cover them in less detail, with links to further information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. More examples would be ideal.. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory. Conclusion Comprehensive, but too long. Summarise key points and take-away messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Reduce use of weasel words (e.g., "imperative implications") which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning. Layout Perhaps a better structure could be start with "Fundamental assumptions of criminal profiling" and "How criminal profiling is used by law enforcement agencies" and then move to theories. At least, I think, that would be easier for a reader to follow and understand. Grammar Use serial commas[2] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3]. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use either APA style or wiki style, but not a mixture of both. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. Check and correct punctuation use for et al. Provide the doi-based hyperlinks. Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). Very good use of quiz(zes). Consider whether the quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section. Basic use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~7 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence.

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. The presentation is under the maximum time limit. Overview The opening slide does not present and narrate the correct title and sub-title, thus there is a mismatch between the focus of the book chapter and the accompanying presentation . Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic. It is unclear why the focus of the presentation is on motivated reasoning in criminal profiling. This has drifted from the original topic: "Criminal profiling: How is criminal profiling used by law enforcement agencies?". The selection of content is poor because it doesn't provide a sufficient overview of the most relevant psychological theory and research about how criminal profiling is used to determine the motivations of those who commit crimes. Instead, the focus is on cognitive biases of investigators using motivated reasoning. The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological theory. More information about the theories mentioned at ~00:40 secs would be useful. The presentation makes insufficient use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic take-home message(s). The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus questions that are more directly relevant to the original topic). Audio The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Audio recording quality was OK. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is well produced. Meta-data The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not communicated. Probably the images are all from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:04, 17 November 2021 (UTC)