Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Cooperation motivation

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Topic development feedback

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  1. The title was missing
  2. Capitalisation of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents
  1. Used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence
  1. Overly complicated 4-level structure - consider refining to a 3-level or 2-level structure
  2. As you become more familiar with the topic, consider developing more descriptive headings
  1. Write the chapter using 3rd person perspective, although a case study or feature box could use 1st or 2nd person perspective
  1. Reeve (2018) is a secondary source; it could lead to primary sources which should be the basis for the chapter
  2. Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year)
  3. For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  4. Overview - Promising. Consider adding:
    1. a description of the problem
    2. an image
    3. an example or case study
  5. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  6. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  7. Consider including more examples/case studies
  8. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. underway
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?
  1. A figure is presented
  2. Caption should include Figure X in italics and the rest of the caption in normal font
  3. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. doi formatting
    4. separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. Good
  2. Links have now been split into the See also and External links sections

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:00, 18 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
  2. The main areas for potential improvement are:
    1. Providing a more indepth synthesis of research
    2. Quality of written expression
    3. Consider introducing case studies to provide practical examples of psychological science in action
    4. Consider including more interactive learning features (e.g., tables, lists, quizzes)
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
  1. Solid Overview.
  2. Clear focus question(s).
  3. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest.
  1. Relevant theories are well selected and explained.
  2. A wide range of theory is covered. Consider perhaps being more selective and focusing on more indepth application of fewer theories.
  3. There is possibly too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
  1. Reasonable depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts.
  1. Basic overview of relevant research.
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
  2. Basic critical thinking about research is evident.
  3. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  1. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research.
  2. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory.
  1. Unnecessarily repetitive of Overview.
  2. Add practical, take-home messages.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
    2. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
    3. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1].
  4. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Social -> social).
  5. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    3. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    4. Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words.
    5. Figures and tables
      1. Figures are very well captioned.
      2. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
    6. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses.
      2. Comma not needed for citations like this: "Deci et al., (1981)"
    7. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[2]
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation
      3. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
      4. Include hyperlinked dois
  1. Overall, the use of learning features is good.
  2. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
  3. Good use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters.
  4. Good use of image(s).
  5. No use of table(s).
  6. Good use of feature box(es).
  7. No use of quiz(zes).
  8. No use of case studies or examples.
  1. ~5 logged, useful, minor/moderate/major social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:25, 8 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a good presentation.
  1. The title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic.
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  4. The presentation is well structured.
  5. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory.
  6. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research.
  7. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  8. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information.
  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s).
  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to.
  2. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  4. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent.
  2. The presentation makes effective/good/basic use of text and image based slides.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  6. The presentation is well produced using simple tools.
  1. The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:05, 18 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

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