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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
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Hi there! I love how you formatted this chapter. As this chapter is due tomorrow, I did some moderate copyediting to correct some wording to make the sentences flow better and made sure all your references were apa 7 formatted (I corrected about 7-9 references for captalisation and italicisation). This chapter is very thouroughly researched and very well-written and concise. Due to the very close due date I didn't leave any suggestions as I didn't want things to still be included by the 9 AM deadline. Anyways, Congrats and good luck on your book chapter! U3203008 (discuss • contribs)
Hey. Love the little case study, I really think it is a nice touch.
Please consider using 'key learnings' box in your overview. Think about what someone will know once they have read this. You never know how useful it will be to someone and in the end, it will help you write your conclusion! My chapter has a good template you can use if you go into 'source editing' and copy the code (copy, don't cut)
https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2021/Indigenous_Australian_well-being
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Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
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Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Overall, the use of learning features is excellent.
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
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The presentation addresses the topic.
The presentation is well structured.
The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research.
The presentation makes excellent use of the initial example but thereafter could benefit from other illustrative examples of the abstract concepts presented.
It could also expand to reduce some of the theoretical material in favour of expanding on the ideas in the last slide about how CD is motivational.
The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to.
The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio.
Audio communication is clear and well paced.
Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
Audio recording quality was excellent. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., quiet, tinny, white noise, keyboard/mouse clicks audible). Consider using an external microphone.