Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Cognitive dissonance and motivation

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

Heading casing edit

 
Hi U3202904. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:05, 27 August 2021 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback edit

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Title edit

  1. Excellent

User page edit

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution edit

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Headings edit

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.

Key points edit

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  2. Good balance of theory and research.
  3. Some use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.

Figure edit

  1. A figure is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References edit

  1. Excellent
  2. Just use one style - either wiki style or APA style - either is fine, but don't mix and match.
  3. For APA style, dois should be active hyperlinks (i.e., clickable).

Resources edit

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:45, 6 September 2021 (UTC)Reply


Suggestion edit

Hi there! I love how you formatted this chapter. As this chapter is due tomorrow, I did some moderate copyediting to correct some wording to make the sentences flow better and made sure all your references were apa 7 formatted (I corrected about 7-9 references for captalisation and italicisation). This chapter is very thouroughly researched and very well-written and concise. Due to the very close due date I didn't leave any suggestions as I didn't want things to still be included by the 9 AM deadline. Anyways, Congrats and good luck on your book chapter! U3203008 (discusscontribs)

Hey this is a really interesting topic, however I feel like your chapter could do great with a little about dissonance with smoking, as an ex-smoker myself, I know how hard it is to quit and the crazy things we justify to not acknowledge the problem I had here is the article, hope it helps https://psycnet.apa.org/record/1968-13611-001 --U3202984 (discusscontribs) 11:30, 15 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hey. Love the little case study, I really think it is a nice touch. Please consider using 'key learnings' box in your overview. Think about what someone will know once they have read this. You never know how useful it will be to someone and in the end, it will help you write your conclusion! My chapter has a good template you can use if you go into 'source editing' and copy the code (copy, don't cut) https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2021/Indigenous_Australian_well-being

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Chapter review and feedback edit

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Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview edit

  1. Well developed Overview.

Theory — Breadth edit

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.

Theory — Depth edit

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Examples are used throughout, which is great.
  3. However, some of the descriptions (e.g., about the revisions) were somewhat abstract, so some micro-examples in such paragraphs could also be helpful.
  4. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information.

Research — Key findings edit

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed.
  2. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Research — Critical thinking edit

  1. Very good critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. considering the strength of relationships
    2. suggesting more specific directions for future research

Integration edit

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.

Conclusion edit

  1. Clear summary.
  2. Consider adding practical, take-home messages.

Written expression — Style edit

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min).
  4. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    2. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
      2. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
      3. Figures are very well captioned.
    3. Citations use correct APA style.
    4. References use correct APA style.

Written expression — Learning features edit

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is excellent.
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  3. Excellent use of image(s).
  4. Excellent use of table(s).
  5. Excellent use of feature box(es).
  6. Excellent use of quiz(zes).
  7. Excellent use of case studies or examples.

Social contribution edit

  1. ~9 logged, useful, major + 1 minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:39, 5 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia feedback

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Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation.

Overview edit

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. This presentation has a very engaging introduction to hook audience interest  .
  3. A context for the topic is established.
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages.

Content edit

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic.
  3. The presentation is well structured.
  4. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of the initial example but thereafter could benefit from other illustrative examples of the abstract concepts presented.
  7. It could also expand to reduce some of the theoretical material in favour of expanding on the ideas in the last slide about how CD is motivational.

Conclusion edit

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with basic, clear take-home message.

Audio edit

  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced.
  4. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. Audio recording quality was excellent. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., quiet, tinny, white noise, keyboard/mouse clicks audible). Consider using an external microphone.

Video edit

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  6. The presentation is very well produced.

Meta-data edit

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided.

Licensing edit

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:49, 19 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

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