Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Cognitive behaviour therapy for anger

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:43, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence If making the second or subsequent edit to a page, provide the direct link via: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Minimal, 1-level heading structure - develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the largest section(s) Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections See earlier comment about Heading casing Key points Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Write using 3rd person perspective Focus questions #1 and #2 are not key foci - brief summaries can be provided, with links to more info #3 is relevant - expand Useful case study in the Overview Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Promising key points for each section, with relevant citations Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory and research Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. This is particularly important for this chapter as there are several other chapters about closely related concepts. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): promising development what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: doi formatting (should be active hyperlink) include issue number for journal article separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Use bullet-points Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Use bullet-points Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:43, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Just a small grammar comment

This is really good! very thorough and visually interesting as well. Well done! I just wanted to let you know in one of the headings there is grammar issue 'Implications of r`esearch' and also 'Conclusion:' I think you can remove the ':' - I didn't want to amend it just incase you were working on it still but wanted to let you know! :) Happy almost end of semester. U3179143 (discuss • contribs) 20:39, 17 October 2021 (UTC) U3179143

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Over the maximum word count. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth There is too much general theoretical material (esp. about CBR). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). The chapter starts to directly address the topic after about 2000 words with the section titled "Application of CBT for anger management". Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by incorporating embedded links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Anger). Theory — Depth Excellent depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Research — Critical thinking Good critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be describing the research findings in more detail. Integration There is basic integration between theory and research. Conclusion Key points are summarised. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning (e.g., see my copyedits to the Overview). Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Anger -> anger). APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Figures and tables Figures are very well captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation "Retrieved from" is no longer used (APA style, 7th ed.) Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1. Excellent use of image(s). No use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Format bullet-points and numbered lists (e.g., for the ABC framework), per Tutorial 1. Excellent use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~20 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:48, 12 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented. It should also be narrated to help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A context for the topic is established. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s). The presentation could be strengthened by adding practical, take-home messages. Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Audio communication is well paced. Basic intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is hesitant in some places - could benefit from further practice. Audio recording quality was OK. Some minor background noises. Video Overall, visual display quality is good. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams in a basic way. The presentation is produced using simple tools. Meta-data Use the correct chapter title and sub-title for the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description). A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:48, 20 November 2021 (UTC)