Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Boredom and technology addiction

Suggestion

Hi. Your book chapter is looking great so far and really interesting read! Just make sure you check your capitalisation on your quiz and I think maybe adding focus questions at the start of the chapter would be really helpful. Such as: what is the relationship between boredom and technology addiction? What are the theories of boredom? What why can be done to reduce the harm? All the best! --Anna u3200574 (discuss • contribs) 07:45, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi, I think that a case study would be a really useful resource to add to your topic. It would provide a real world example of how people might use technology to combat their boredom, or how technology addiction might stem from boredom. I came across an interesting page that you might like to have a look at exploring Digital media use and mental health. There is a lot of information regarding the impacts of technology addiction on mental health and references you may find useful. --U3186377 (discuss • contribs) 08:31, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Hi, i managed to find this article on scholar, it is a bit short but highlights the issues of phone usage and how it can affect the way we seek attention. https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2021/Freedom_and_motivation&diff=prev&oldid=2313713

hopefully, this is useful --Takudzwa14 (discuss • contribs) 15:05, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Hi! Iv’e found a video which I thought might be useful to include in your external links. It’s a Tedtalk which discusses technology addiction and the benefits of boredom :) - --TaraU3187760 (discuss • contribs) 11:46, 13 October 2021 (UTC) https://www.ted.com/talks/manoush_zomorodi_how_boredom_can_lead_to_your_most_brilliant_ideas?language=en#t-949944

Hi! I have loved reading your page, so relevant to current circumstances! I just thought I would give you this ted talk which talks about social media addiction. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JH5bC-SLvb4

Topic development feedback

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Title Excellent User page Brief description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Add link to book chapter Social contribution No 2021 summarised contributions with link(s) to evidence. Headings Template added, but not customised Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. Key points Overview - Consider: keeping to a max of 3 paragraphs - more detailed content should be moved into subsequent sections adding an image adding an example or case study Basic development of key points Move references into the References section and provide APA style citations in the main text Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed Figure An figure is not presented. References Three APA style references are not provided in this section. Resources None provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:36, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hey this topic is super interesting and relevant to the modern world... kinda scary if you ask me. Anyway, I came across this interesting article about whether overexposure to technology as a young child is better or worse for them. It explores developmental and learning implications so give it a read you might find it useful https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0896627310006781 --U3202984 (discuss • contribs) 11:01, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hi! This is a really relevant topic for this last years! I see that you have no headings yet so a starter I would recommend could be perhaps the affect COVID has had on people reliance on technology and how this has lead to possible lasting addiction! Here is a link on the topic (https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s12144-021-01470-8) Good luck! --U3204694 (discuss • contribs) 10:32, 30 September 2021 (UTC)

Added 2 topics under see also section

Hello! I just thought it'd be useful to add in two topics under your see also section namely Digital media use and mental health

Instagram's impact on people. Feel free to keep it or edit it out if you think they don't fit.- U3204438 Added in at 17/10/2021

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:59, 8 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Too long. Shouldn't have sub-headings (removed). Consider developing focus questions to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. Overall, there is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Theory — Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is reasonably well integrated. Conclusion Basic dot point summary - expand to paragraphs. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Provide clear take-home messages that address focus questions. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format. Layout Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove additional bold). Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[2] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3]. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Technology -> technology). APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Use either wiki style or APA style, but not both. Use either wiki style or APA style, but not both. Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Basic use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:59, 8 November 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. Direct quotes need sources and page number(s). Even better, use your own words. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Synthesise and summarise. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research within the maximum time frame. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Audio communication is well paced. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is hesitant - could benefit from further practice. Audio recording quality was OK. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. No written description of the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:11, 19 November 2021 (UTC)

Book chapter resubmission feedback

1. These changes were reviewed.
2. Overall, there have been several minor improvements.
3. The Overview has been expanded.
4. The review of theory has improved.
5. The review of research has improved.
6. The Conclusion has been expanded.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:40, 6 December 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation resubmission feedback

1. Overall, this is an inadequate presentation.
2. This is a text-based, narrated presentation.
3. There is unnecessary focus on COVID-19 - this is not part of the topic.
4. There in insufficient coverage of relevant theory.
5. Check microphone set-up - audio quality could be improved by using a plugged in microphone instead of an onboard microphone.
6. The narration is hesitant - consider more practice.
7. Take-home messages are general/vague.
8. The presentation has the correct title, but the sub-title is missing.
9. A basic description is provided. Consider adding more detail.
10. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.
11. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids.
12. No licensing details are provided.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:40, 6 December 2021 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hello,

I enjoyed reading your chapter as I can admit I have an addiction to technology. I also liked how you did your referencing, it definitely made your chapter flow better.

A suggestion I have for you is to make sure you are italicising the name of the journal publisher in the referencing. For example for your reference with the author Leung, L. (2020), you would italicise "Computers in Human Behaviour"

(~~~ = U3203414) Lewis.Kusk (discuss • contribs) 04:42, 15 October 2022 (UTC)