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Hello,
I have added 2 references to your references section. One pertaining to the approaches to motivation and antidepressants and the other looking at how antidepressants affect motivation within a conditioned preference place, and this study was conducted using animal studies.
Good Luck u3203372AP269 (discuss • contribs) 05:48, 17 August 2021 (UTC)Reply
Hi there
I am interested in whether the research looks how the dosage of the antidepressant medication effects on motivation. For example if somebody is taking a very low dose, just enough to have a therapeutic effect, would the medication still impact motivation in the same way?
Great topic to choose!
Best wishes --U3199117 (discuss • contribs) 23:28, 28 August 2021 (UTC) 9:17am, 29 August 2021Reply
Hi there,
I felt it was important to note that Maslow's hierachry of needs is a pryamid and this pryamid serves an important purpose. In your work you refer to the hierarchy as a 'chain of command' throught the section "Maslow's theory of the hierarchy of needs".
The lower part of the hierarchy refer to the 'foundational' needs (food, water, warmth, rest etc), without the foundational needs being met the pryamid (hierarchy) would be unable to stand as the 'foundations' are weak. This is an important distinction as a 'chain' implies each segment of the chain are as important as each other, which does not align with Maslow's theory. I believe some simple rewording through this section would showcase a stronger understanding of the theory.
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Hi there, I have recently discovered that despite dopamine being a key chemical in motivation, there are no selective dopamine reuptake inhibitors, due to decay. Just thought this might be something you may want to expand on.
Additionally, it might be beneficial to include a note or section on interactions between anti-depressants and other drugs.
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abbreviating and focusing current content - detailed material can be moved into subsequent sections
provide a description of the "problem" and what will be covered
refine focus questions - only the 3rd question is directly on topic - consider expanding this question into related focus questions
an image
an example or case study
Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., explaining antidepressants). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
The coverage of motivation theory is very broad/general. Be more selective and narrow down more specifically to theories which help to explain the research findings about the effects of ADs on motivation.
Citations about the effects of ADs on motivation appear to be lacking - identify this literature and build the chapter around it.
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
Consider including more examples/case studies
Conclusion (the most important section):
hasn't been developed
what might the take-home, practical messages be?
in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?
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Note that my sense is that you may not have been working through tutorial materials where key skills for the major project are taught?
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi! @U3197375
How are you?
I like the topic you have chosen, it has a lot on it so really, research should be easy as!
I found the 'overview' really confusing, it is pretty wordy at the moment, but it seems as though you are in the process of starting your chapter, so I'm sure you have ample time to simplify. If you want to see what a decent length intro or overview looks like, you can check my page out :)
However, the content is good, once I had a few read-throughs. I think you are on the right track. Welldone.Can't wait to see what this looks like in a few weeks.
--LozGrace (discuss • contribs) 08:57, 1 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
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The chapter mostly consists of general information about motivation and general info about antidepressants rather than concentrating on the theory and research about their relationship and what can be done about it.
There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about motivation and about antidepressants as separate phenomenon). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
The chapter starts to directly address the topic after ~3500 words of preamble with the section titled: "How do antidepressants impact the motivation of an individual"
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
Many paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Layout
Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove additional bold).
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Very good use of image(s).
No use of table(s).
Good use of feature box(es).
Basic use of quiz(zes). The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each major section rather than being presented as a single set of questions.
Basic use of case study. The case studies could be improved by focusing them more directly on the target topic for the chapter.
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