Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Affective disorders

Heading casing

Hi U3186377. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:12, 28 August 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page, create a direct link like this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Strive to use the best available peer-reviewed academic sources as the citations (rather than websites or encyclopedia etc.). Supplementary embedded links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity pages are fine/great. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Overview - Promising. Consider adding: an image an example or case study description of "affective"/mood Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research throughout Some use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Strive to add more embedded links to specific book chapter about affect and affective disorders. In this way, the current chapter can become a gateway entry point to those other, more specific chapters. Perhaps also consider subclinical affective problems Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): well developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure Excellent Caption uses APA style Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Excellent Resources See also Excellent External links Very good Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:32, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter on a challengingly broad topic, that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The types and signs/symptoms are well covered, although I suggest combining and shortening these sections. The causes content should be expanded, with the bullet-points fleshed out. Build more strongly on other mood-related psychopathology chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other relevant chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Psychopathology). Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies about the effectiveness of different treatments would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration There is basic integration between theory and research. Conclusion Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Key points are reasonably well summarised. Paragraphs 2 and 3 could be moved into the section about treatments. Fantastic take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format (e.g., psychosocial factors). Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. The structure is very promising. I think a next draft should combine the types and signs/symptoms sections and, in the process, reduce their combined word count. This would allow room to expand the review of research about treatment effectiveness. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Replace double spaces with single spaces. Figures Figures are very well captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Check and correct formatting (e.g., (Fagiolini, et al., 2013) -> (Fagiolini et al., 2013)) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s). No use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~6 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:59, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A context for the topic is established. Focus questions are presented. Content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. Check and correct spelling (e.g., pharmaceuticals). An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s). Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was very good. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides. The font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The amount of text presented per slide should be reduced to make it easier to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. The presentation is incorrectly categorised as being for kids. Lay out comment I suggest getting rid of the dot points where you had written what you still need to add to your book chapter but did not complete, it will also make it look neater. Proof reading the chapter would have helped just in case you had forgotten to get rid of them :) Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:05, 16 November 2021 (UTC)