Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Academic resilience

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

Referencing edit

Hi Tara, the American Psychological Association (APA) 7th edition referencing requires journal titles to be italicised in the reference list which has now been added. APA 7th edition does not require "doi:" in the reference list which has now been removed. The Victoria University library guide has a great range of example references that you can refer to in the future. --CharliU3203035 (discusscontribs) 06:23, 27 August 2021 (UTC)Reply

Word Count edit

Hi Tara, your book chapter looks great! I can see you've put a lot of work into this assessment:) Just a friendly reminder about the word count for this assignment (i.e. 4000 words - everything from the top of your page to the bottom), and it seems you may be almost 500 words over. Words beyond this won't be considered and I wouldn't want you to lose any marks. --U3205964 (discusscontribs) 05:01, 16 October 2021 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback edit

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

 

Title edit

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page edit

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution edit

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence

Headings edit

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic
  2. It makes logical sense to use the sub-title questions as top-level headings.

Key points edit

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a more evocative description of the "problem"
    2. an image
    3. an example or case study
  3. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words
  4. Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year)
  5. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. under developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?

Figure edit

  1. Excellent
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

References edit

  1. Very good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. italicisation
    2. separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Resources edit

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:28, 18 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback edit

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview edit

  1. Well developed Overview - clear and easy to understand
  2. Clear focus question(s).
  3. A case study could help to help engage reader interest.

Theory — Breadth edit

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.

Theory — Depth edit

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Key citations are well used.
  3. Tables and lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information.

Research — Key findings edit

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Are there any relevant meta-analyses or other types of systematic review?

Research — Critical thinking edit

  1. Critical thinking is evidenced by: discussing the direction of relationships.
  2. Critical thinking could be further evidenced by: considering the strength of relationships.
  3. The conclusion makes some suggestions about future research.

Integration edit

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.

Conclusion edit

  1. Well developed.
  2. Clear take-home messages.

Written expression — Style edit

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. I simplified some sentences, shortening the chapter overall by about 100 words.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. (fixed)
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent.
  4. APA style
    1. Citations use correct APA style.
    2. References use good, but not perfect APA style.

Written expression — Learning features edit

  1. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
  2. Very good use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  3. Very good use of image(s), including creating and uploading your own. However, the image descriptions on Wikimedia Commons should include acknowledgement about the source(s) for the models/ideas.
  4. Excellent use of a table.
  5. Excellent use of feature box(es).
  6. Excellent of quiz(zes).
  7. Good use of case studies or examples. Ideally, return to the case study and explain what changes could be made to improve the situation.

Social contribution edit

  1. 12 logged, useful, minor to moderate size social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:14, 21 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.

Overview edit

  1. This presentation has any engaging introduction to hook audience interest.
  2. A slide with the title and sub-title is presented (albeit briefly) - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Focus questions are presented.

Content edit

  1. The presentation addresses the topic.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  3. The presentation is well structured.
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  7. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information.

Conclusion edit

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent take-home message(s).

Audio edit

  1. The audio is easy to follow, and interesting to listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  6. Audio recording quality was excellent.

Video edit

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides, with text and images.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  6. The presentation is very well produced.

Meta-data edit

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing edit

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:40, 18 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

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