Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Unconscious bias and emotion

Heading casing

Hi U3149815. FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing). For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:02, 27 August 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Very good Capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created About me Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Provide an internal link to the book chapter (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Section headings Promising 2-level heading structure. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Overview: Merge the two sets of questions Provide a description of the problem and what will be covered Consider including an image and an example or case study Be wary of providing too much general info about unconscious bias - make sure to focus on the relation between emotion and unconscious bias. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Promising inclusion of examples/case studies towards the end - consider introducing one or more case studies earlier. Image Excellent Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: spell out all journal names doi formatting Resources Reasonably good See also Use internal links (per Tutorial 1) External links Include source site in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:40, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

Content

Really interesting topic so far, I'm also doing a theory concerned with unbiased emotion try referring to this weeks lecture titled "Virtual Room / recording_20" in the lecture recording tabs for some information and videos provided about psychologicla priming. --Oscar3176498 (discuss • contribs) 20:50, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. This chapter is well under the maximum word count. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1]. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features In the see also section, use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic/No use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes), although I'm not sure about the last question - can't people be "heightist" unconsciously? Basic use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., White and Black). APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis. Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A comma is needed after "et al." in parentheses (i.e., "et al.,"). Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. References are not in full APA style. For example: Include the full doi URL. Social contribution ~1 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:39, 8 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation because its content deviates from the original topic. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Structure and content There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly. This presentation focuses on unconscious memory, which is a useful example, but the presentations seems to lack a bigger picture focus on unconscious bias and emotion. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes basic use of theory. The presentation makes basic use of research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit. Communication The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using less text per slide; it is cognitive difficult to listen to fast paced audio and simultaneously read so much text. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech. The visual communication is supplemented in a very basic way by one or more images. Production quality The video is produced using simple tools. The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter. This is problematic because the video content deviates from the original topic. Audio recording quality was very good. Visual display quality was good. Consider using more slides with less text. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. An active link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided, but it does to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:23, 20 November 2020 (UTC)