Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Transgenerational trauma

APA referencing

Hi, your plan looks great :) Just to remind you for APA referencing (7th ed) if you have more then 3 or more authors to write et al. for example you will need to change this reference (Pai, Suris, & North, 2017) to (Pai et al., 2017). Looks like an intresting topic! --U3190210 (discuss • contribs) 06:25, 28 August 2020 (UTC)

Another example

Hi, I had a look at your examples of intergenerational trauma focusing on Australian Indigenous peoples and Holocaust survivors. I did a bit of looking and found a great article about Indigenous Canadians and transgenerational trauma. If you need another example or a few extra words, might be worth looking into! Intergenerational Trauma U3189449 (discuss • contribs) 03:45, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Section headings Excellent Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Overall, promising development, if somewhat lean in some sections - basically, keep going. Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study APA style: et. al should be et al.; p 2 should be p. 2 Check out and build in link(s) to: Indigenous Australian transgenerational trauma and psychological well-being Image Excellent Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: page number formatting include dois where available None Resources See also Include source in brackets after link External links Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:51, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained. Excellent use of case studies. Brilliant, nuanced, and sensitive application to the Indigenous Australian context. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Minimal use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). Thanks for contributing images to Wiki Commons. Very good use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes), but good use of reflective questions for the case study. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are very good. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. APA style Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References use very good APA style. Check and correct use of capitalisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~9 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:32, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The focus of the presentation probably overemphasises trauma and insufficiently emphasises transgenerational trauma. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes good use of theory. The presentation makes good use of research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies. Consider adding a Conclusion slide with practical take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of text based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. In some places, the audio communication is hesitant - could benefit from further practice. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was problematic due to the fades between edits. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. This presentation may have violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement - if so, remove or change the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided, but it does go a specific section rather than the top of the chapter. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:02, 22 November 2020 (UTC)