Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Theory of basic human values

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be:

== Cats and mice ==

rather than

== Cats and Mice ==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:11, 20 September 2020 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

 

Title and sub-title

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  1. Title and sub-title have been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page

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  1. Created
  2. About me
    1. Description about self provided
    2. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  3. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution

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  1. Repeated contribution with indirect link(s) to evidence.
  2. Instead, summarise and add direct link to evidence. To add a direct link: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
  3. Use a numbered list.

Section headings

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  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure with some 2nd level development - could benefit from more complete 2nd-level development.
  2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points

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  1. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the problem and what will be covered
    2. focus questions
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  2. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
  3. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  5. Use APA style when referring to numbers.
  6. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. basic development
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?

Image

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  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption
    1. does not use APA style.
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.
  4. Consider decreasing image size.

References

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  1. Excellent - make sure to stick with wiki style - or switch to APA style - but don't do both.

Resources

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  1. See also
    1. Include source in brackets after link
    2. Also link to relevant book chapters
  2. External links
    1. Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:11, 20 September 2020 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter.
  3. The Overview is underdeveloped. Consider:
    1. Presenting an illustrative case study to help engage reader interest.
    2. Developing focus questions to help guide the reader and structure the chapter.
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained.
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten.
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    4. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
    2. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of image(s).
    4. Very good use of table(s).
    5. No use of feature box(es).
    6. No use of quiz(zes).
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
  5. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers and double quotation marks.
    3. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    4. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    5. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style for Figure captions. See example.
      2. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style.
      3. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
  1. ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:04, 29 November 2020 (UTC)Reply

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