Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This is looking very good, I would suggest two small improvements. From a visual point of view moving figure 4 up a little would fill in the blank gap. With your overview i suggest maybe adding your quote into a 'pretty box' and to try and combine the two sets of questions you currently have. --U3187381 (discuss • contribs) 11:25, 16 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Link provided to book chapter (rename the link to make it more user-friendly)
Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi, your chapter looks great and I can see that its almost finished, so I just have a couple of editing suggestions:
1. I think that having both the focus questions and the questions in the outline is a bit confusing, and some of them are similar, so maybe you could combine them? eg What is sympathy and what does it look like?, How and why do we experience sympathy?
2. You have a lot of relevant figures, but they aren't mentioned in the text. According to the marking criteria they should be referred to at least once.
3. Don't forget to italicise journal names and volume numbers in the references.
I hope this helps U3170940 (discuss • contribs) 00:08, 16 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
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Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1].
"People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects".
Direct quotes are overused. They should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Learning features
Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Excellent use of image(s).
Good use of table(s).
Very good use of feature box(es).
Excellent use of reflective questions.
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
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The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
The presentation makes creative use of time-lapsed, hand-drawn visual illustration. This works particularly well for the theoretical diagrams e.g., silk ring theory.
The presentation makes good use of narrated audio.
Reasonably well-paced. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio recording quality was excellent.
Visual display quality was very good. Sometimes the audio could have been better aligned with the visuals.
A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
A link to the book chapter is provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.