Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Shame, guilt, and recidivism
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editRevised sentence to make it third person, added punctuation and remove words for conciseness. --U3177510 (discuss • contribs) 13:09, 29 August 2020 (UTC)
Read through and adjusted some spelling errors, changed one in-text reference to align with APA referencing style --Shayley Woodgate (discuss • contribs) 08:10, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
Further Reading
editHi this book chapter is really great and very interesting. If you wanted to read further or expand there a few chapters on recidivism in the Wiley International Handbook of Correctional Psychology (Devon ., et al 2019). --U3202324 (discuss • contribs) 11:02, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
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editHi, This chapter reads really well. The outline is clear, makes sense and is directly relevant to answering the question being asked. I changed a sentence which wasn't complete and fixed one spelling error. I have a few minor comments:
- Check referencing for your tables - you've referenced this in your paragraph but there should also be a caption for your table which describes where you have gotten this information from.
- Don't forget with APA formatting you need a reference after each sentence/idea which you have used other's work for. For example "A study investigated the role of reintegrative shaming on recidivism on participants who exceeded the legal blood alcohol content" should have a reference after it, not just at the end of the paragraph.
- APA formatting requires all initials for authors in the referencing table, not just the first. For example: de Hooge, I. E., Breugelmans, S. M., Wagemans, F. M. A., & Zeelenberg, M.
U3025324 (discuss • contribs) 02:46, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
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APA referencing, theories and figures
editHey! Your chapter is looking really great, it is very clear and easy to understand. I have added some suggestions below that you may find useful.
1. Just make sure you refer to pictures as figures rather than images (see Figure 1).
2. Make sure all your citations have dates with them. I think one may have been missing
3. When referencing a theory if does not need to be capitalised for example the dobby effect. You can however capitalise theorist names. See this link for more information https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/capitalization/diseases-disorders-therapies
Your chapter is looking great. I hope this feedback helps.
--U3190210 (discuss • contribs) 01:23, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
Thanks so much for your feedback! I've made changes based on it :)
--U3190229 (discuss • contribs) 05:01, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
Interim feedback
edit@U3190229: Some suggestions from a quick look at the current draft:
- Overall, looking good; the following comments are relatively minor.
- I've made some minor edits
- Consider adding wiki links to the first mention of key words such as recidivism. Such wiki links could also go to relevant Wikiversity book chapters.
- References:
- Check and correct capitalisation. See the UCLearn discussion threads about APA style referencing.
- Check and correct spacing (e.g., there should be a space after a period).
Social Contribution
editYour book chapter is very interesting and and very informational. I am definitely linking your book chapter in mine as I would love to refer back to your page for more information about shame and guilt. If I may comment on anything, it would be the the example of "dinting the friends car" in the pretty box. If you were to add a more in detail example or even a in depth case study referring it back to the image, this would tie your book chapter together and your book chapter would really benefit from this. Everything else is great! --U3190523 (discuss • contribs) 07:19, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
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