Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Positive emotion

Cultural impact, quote and enhancement

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This is looking really good, just a few things i have noticed. Number 1 the direct quotes that you have used havent got page numbers which is needed for APA referencing. Within the enhancement section it could be helpful to provide links to websites for the various strategies. Finally within the effects section adding some information about the impact of culture could be beneficial. I found this article which could help https://psycnet.apa.org/record/2008-08084-005. --U3187381 (discusscontribs) 01:12, 17 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

What are the physiological experiences of positive emotions?

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Could be interesting to look at what happens to us physiologically when we experience some of these positive emotions. --Jackson McNee (discusscontribs) 04:55, 27 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

Feedback

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Hey! I found this link on 'Adolescents’ happiness-increasing strategies, temperament, and character: Mediation models on subjective well-being'. I thought it might be helpful in adding another dimension to your last heading. — Preceding unsigned comment added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]])

Hello! Great stuff so far, it was a fun read. I was thinking it would be nice to add a section about the physiological responses/neural connections associated with positive emotions. It would definitely add more depth to your points. I believe I read a touch about dopamine levels and brain structures related to positive emotions on this article about the broaden-and-build theory - which you have also introduced in this book chapter. Perhaps you could check it out to see if it's anything you'd like to include in your book chapter :) Comment by U3189154

Book chapter focus question

  • Consider adapting focus question to a singular question
  • Can include subquestions in addition to the focus question

U3187226 (discusscontribs) 10:02, 9 November 2020 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

 

Title and sub-title

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  1. Excellent

User page

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  1. Not created

Social contribution

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  1. None summarised with link(s) to evidence.

Section headings

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  1. Logical structure, limited development
  2. The most important of the 4 questions are the latter 3
  3. Consider perhaps just using a summary table for briefly listing positive emotions.

Key points

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  1. Basic development of key points for some sections, with relevant citations.
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. an image.
    2. an example or case study.
  3. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed.
  4. Remove or adapt generic template content.
  5. Remember to target theory and research.
  6. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words.
  7. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  8. Consider including more examples/case studies.

Image

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  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption
    1. uses APA style.
    2. explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References

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  1. Some of the references are not peer-reviewed, academic sources - move them to external links
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. doi formatting

Resources

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  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:52, 15 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

Further topic development feedback: the user page is User:Taylor Mamukic
User page
  1. Created - minimal, but sufficient
  2. About me
    1. Brief description about self provided
    2. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  3. Link provided to book chapter. Consider also including the sub-title.
Social contribution
  1. Excellent
  2. If the edit is not the first one on the page, add direct links to evidence like this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.
Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:58, 30 September 2020 (UTC)Reply
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Hey, Had a look into some articles which may be useful for your chapter. This one 'Positive emotions broaden the scope of attention and thought-action repertoires' has some great information on the Broaden and Build theory that you already mentioned, as well as looking at some effects that positive emotions can have. Also, 'Positive emotions trigger upward spiral towards emotional wellbeing' which I found really interesting to red and had some great relevant information for you! An additional note: I think you could utilise a case study under the heading 'How can we enhance positive emotion' and use a fictional story type scenario to describe the process of one of the mentioned ways. U3202026 (discusscontribs) 23:33, 7 October 2020 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained.
  2. The Reeve (2018) textbook is probably overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Did you consult Dunker (1945)? If not, this should be a secondary citation.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
    2. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects".
    3. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1].
    4. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    3. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project (e.g., to chapters about different positive emotions).
    3. Good use of image(s).
    4. Very good use of table(s).
    5. Very good use of feature box(es).
    6. Very good use of quiz(zes).
  4. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  5. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent.
  6. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    2. In general, do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    3. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style for Figure captions. See example.
    4. Citations use correct APA style.
    5. References use correct APA style.
    6. References are not in full APA style. For example:
  1. ~11 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:20, 10 November 2020 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a good presentation.
  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation makes very good use of theory.
  5. The presentation makes basic use of research.
  6. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  7. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
  1. The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  6. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
  1. The video is well produced using simple tools.
  2. The video is basically produced using simple tools.
  3. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  5. Audio recording quality was OK, but the music was distracting - difficult to listen to narration and music and read text on screen.
  6. Visual display quality was very good.
  7. Image sources and their copyright status are provided.
  8. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  9. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  10. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  11. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:29, 23 November 2020 (UTC)Reply

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