Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Panic

Social contribution

I added a few symptoms based on the Mayo article you had in your reference list. Please feel free to delete or adjust it if it doesnt work with your chapter. All the best. David. --U115433 (discuss • contribs) 10:05, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:19, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Many people interpret all caps as SHOUTING - consider using sentence casing Otherwise excellent Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Right idea 1st link was broken 2nd link worked well - however, note that this the wiki style uses sentence casing - i.e., first letter capitalised, the rest lowercase (unless a proper noun) Section headings Under-developed, 1-level heading structure - develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the largest section(s). Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Reasonable development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations. Overview - Consider simplifying e.g, to include: a description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Then move the rest of the content into subsequent sections Ideally, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Other links can be moved to the external links section. Consider including more examples/case studies. Include APA style citations. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Image The uploaded image has been claimed as your own work - is this true? I doubt it because the image appears elsewhere on the web. So, I've nominated the image for deletion. For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting References No comment Resources See also None External links Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:19, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Article about MBCT and panic disorder

Hey! I found an article which looks at mindfulness-based cognitive therapy (MBCT) and pharmacotherapy as a treatment program for patients with panic disorder. It might be helpful for your section about managing panic. https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0887618510000794?casa_token=eOBjaviS8AwAAAAA:Ra1OQwMmlAvSiWAgXYqALRoIkTWKtZcEDrbbGiLKuWLl7TZXFQT_01Ul3aFAG3fFzQ0UlVznfW8 --Taylor Mamukic (discuss • contribs) 23:20, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

hi here's a useful link on the precursors of panic attacks HAYWARD, C., KILLEN, J., KRAEMER, H., & TAYLOR, C. (2000). Predictors of Panic Attacks in Adolescents. Journal Of The American Academy Of Child & Adolescent Psychiatry, 39(2), 207-214. doi: 10.1097/00004583-200002000-00021OwenUC (discuss • contribs) 07:50, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this chapter is below satisfactory standard for two reasons: The chapter makes insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations. Non-peer reviewed sources are over-used. The quality of written expression is poor. This chapter is under the maximum word count, so there is room for further development. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory The selection and coverage of relevant theory is reasonably good, but lacks sufficient connection to primary, peer-reviewed sources and integration with peer-reviewed research sources. The term "correlation" is incorrectly used several times in this chapter - in some places, this has been changed. The emphasis is on approaches to clinical treatment of panic disorder - but this is only experienced by 1% of the population. The chapter should also be written for the other 99% who may experience panic from time to time. More case studies could be helpful (e.g., demonstrate key knowledge through a story of someone who learns to better manage their experience of panic - take the reader through the crucial steps). Research Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research. The chapter lacks sufficient grounding in the top psychological science about panic. Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills to a professional standard. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects". Ideally, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Other links can be moved to the external links section. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. The Conclusion could be improved by providing practical, take-home messages. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Promising use of embedded in-text links, however these should mostly be interwiki links to Wikipedia articles rather than external links. Move the external links to the external links section. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Several images were removed because they lacked sufficient licensing information. Renumber Figures accordingly. No use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes). Basic use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). For example, "is" is often used instead of "are". Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). Check and correct use of that vs. who. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al."). Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Move non-peer reviewed sources to the External links section. Social contribution ~10 logged, mostly last minute, mostly useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence. However, some edits seemed to problematic because they removed content (mostly references) from some book chapters?

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:49, 6 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes. Structure and content The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes reasonable use of theory. The presentation makes little use of research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is hesitant - could benefit from further practice. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality Title/sub-title is missing the question mark Audio recording quality was basic - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone. Visual display quality was good. Consider splitting the two-column slides into two separate slides. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:52, 20 November 2020 (UTC)