Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Music and study motivation

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Hello! In one of my previous psychology classes I did a paper on how music affected cognition, with the following paper as a starting point. In contains quite a number of sources cited within it that could potentially be useful to you, I hope! https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fpsyg.2015.02023/full --U3160224 (discuss • contribs) 05:43, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

This seems like it will be a super interesting topic! Have you considered investigating the genre lo-fi? It's been on the rise for the last few years and there's been some great research and feedback on its success. I'm sure there's some good journal articles investigating the effects! --U3190229 (discuss • contribs) 06:58, 28 August 2020 (UTC)

Hi there ! Awesome page so far, what an interesting topic. I found this resources that I thought might be helpful https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S5_APAxM5Lg As a recommendation- It could be really engaging to find music that best motivates study and perhaps add a link to that type of music ? Well done so far :)

Hi! It would be really great to add some case studies and suggestions, as it would make it very relatable and interactive. --U3202324 (discuss • contribs) 06:19, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading advice

Hi,
I suggest that you can use sub-heading to summarize key points in the book chapter, which is easier to read and understand.
--U3178984 (discuss • contribs) 02:51, 28 August 2020 (UTC)

References advice

Hello!
I haven't checked them out myself, but thought maybe you might want to double check the referencing on this page, to make sure it's APA 7th edition. I didn't notice any italics, and DOI's at the very least. Just thought I'd mention it. I think this is the official UC guide. https://canberra.libguides.com/referencing/apa --SLDux (discuss • contribs) 21:49, 29 August 2020 (UTC)

Link advice

I would suggest adding some external links throughout your chapter for key points. This will allow researchers to gain more information if needed. --U3187381 (discuss • contribs) 03:15, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title OK Sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents. If you would like to negotiate the sub-title DM me. User page Created About me Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. If it is not the first edit on a page, add direct links like this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings. There is no need for an Overview and an Introduction. Rename Introduction to something more specific. Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. Key points Some content-related suggestions: There is nothing about "motivation" in the title or sub-title. Motivation is relevant, but no need to over do it. For example, also consider other mechanisms (e.g,. how music may help relax if tense or pump up it lethargic etc. - such pathways may or may be directly related to motivation). Consider expanding content about genre What about pros and cons of music and study? Does it matter when the music is instrumental or has words? Overview - Consider adding: focus questions an image an example or case study Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Expand theory and research. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style. explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Two references styles are used - decide on one - APA style or wiki style For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting Resources See also Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Include source in brackets after link Peer-reviewed articles should go in references and be cited.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:25, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

External link

Hi- here's a really interesting external link that may be relevant to your topic! https://ed.ted.com/best_of_web/IyoBPrLA U3176522 (discuss • contribs) 01:50, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Hello, hope this helps, you might convert some of your paragraphs to tables which can be eye catching for the reader and makes the concepts more clear. Anyway, great work.

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem. This chapter is well over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided, but the chapter is research-dominant, so it is somewhat difficult to understand which psychological theories are being used, although some learning and motivation theory is embedded. Greater use of case studies could help to illustrate key principles in action. Research Overall, this chapter makes extensive, but overly complicated use of research. What is needed is a synthesis and overview rather than micro-descriptions of individual studies. The section summaries are helpful. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Avoid mention of which university a study was conducted - this is largely irrelevant, distracting detail. Other aspects, such as the cultural context are more relevant. Overly detailed descriptions of the methodologies of individual studies are provided. Instead, summarise and highlight the results, including effect sizes, and the findings relate to psychological theory. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. Reduce use of weasel words which bulk out the text (e.g., "this being said", "With the previous points in mind", "As inferred earlier", "With everything stated about music and its effect on motivation so far", etc.), but don't enhance meaning. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. The use of questions for headings works well. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Sound is also available on Wiki Commons, so could suit this chapter (e.g., sample of lo-fi music?). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). No use of case studies. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and make correct use of commas. Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). References use a mixture of wiki style and APA style - use one or the other, not both. For APA style references: Include volume and issue number. Check and correct use of capitalisation. Remove parentheses from hyperlinked dois. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section. Social contribution ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:32, 12 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. The presentation is under the maximum time limit. Structure and content Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic. The presentation makes good use of theory. The presentation makes little use of research. The presentation makes limited use of one or more examples or case studies. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies (e.g., different music samples). A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation makes creative of animated text, static text, narrated audio, and scrolling text. However, the presentation is hard to follow because high concentration is needed to listen/multi-task the multiple cognitive channels involves in processing each of the inputs. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images, notwithstanding the issue of too much information being presented in too short an amount of time. Is the background music lo-fi? Explain for an unfamiliar listener. Production quality The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter. Audio recording quality was OK, but it would probably work better to mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Remove the 5 second blank intro. Visual display quality was basic. The quality of the slides could be improved. For example, the conclusion slide uses different types of dot points and line spacing - why? Where was the music sourced from? What is its copyright status? This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:10, 23 November 2020 (UTC)