Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Motivational science

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:17, 21 August 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Very good User page Not created Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Section headings Use default heading formatting (e.g., avoid additional bold, italics etc.). Remove colons (:) Check grammar (e.g., missing question marks) Motivational theories section doesn't seem to be directly connected to the topic? However, some examples/case studies would really help for this topic e.g., how well does Maslow's hierarchy of needs (theory) hold up under the scrutiny of science (research)? Under-developed, 1-level heading structure - develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the largest section(s). Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclus, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Overly complicated 3-level structure - consider simplifying. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Reeve (2018) should not be a primary source, although it can be a secondary source which helps lead you to primary sources Write using 3rd person perspective. Overview: It is unclear from the plan how the case study will relate to motivational science Perhaps consider sport examples where a scientific approach to motivational science has been used successfully Expression focus questions as questions Consider adding an image. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts (e.g., scientific method, basic motivational theories) and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion is vague. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default. References OK. For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting APA style 7th edition no longer includes publisher location Resources Good Formatting adjusted to be consistent with the book chapter style

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:19, 14 September 2020 (UTC)

Charlos99 Update re:

• User page: Complete. Consider linking to your UC eportfolio and/or other professional social network(s).
• Social contribution. Excellent. Use numbered list.

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of explaining motivational science to an introductory audience. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained. Relevant examples are provided. Did you consult Maslow (1943)? If not, this should be cited as a secondary source. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Written expression The use of extra content in parentheses at the end of most sentences doesn't work from a grammatical point of view. Consider other options including: a new sentence a colon a semi-colon The chapter benefited from a reasonably well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove additional bold). Remove colons from headings Questions should end with a question mark. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comments about heading casing. Learning features See also - move external links to the external links section (per Tutorial 1). External links - move wiki links to the see also section (per Tutorial 1). Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. This would have been the killer feature for this chapter, for it serve as a gateway to the specific chapters about the many concepts mentioned. Basic use of image(s). Increase image sizes to make them easier to read. Very good use of table(s). Minimal use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style In general, do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: First Reeve citation is not in parentheses. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Remove bullet-points Check and correct use of italicisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~2 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence ~7 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:58, 15 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The content about motivational science is appropriate. The content about specific theories isn't really needed unless being used as examples to illustrate how the theories have been developed through motivational science. Could instead link to other presentations about these specific theories in the description. The presentation is well structured. Narrate the Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes basic use of theory. The presentation makes little or no use of research. The presentation makes some use of one or more examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is easy to follow. The presentation makes basic use of animated slides. Consider leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Less text could be presented on some slides to make them easier to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is well produced using simple tools. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Visual display quality was very good. Image sources and their copyright status are/not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:58, 22 November 2020 (UTC)