Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Meta-emotion
Chapter focus question edit
- Consider merging into singular question: How do meta-emotions influence our emotional lives?
U3187226 (discuss • contribs) 09:00, 9 November 2020 (UTC)
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Offered some basic general feedback edit
Hey! Your chapter looks great and I’ve learned a lot about meta-emotion from reading it. I’ve just picked up on a few things that you can do to make things a little better 😊 • You should try to refer to all the figures used in the text – I’ve noticed you’ve done this for Figure 2., but not for Figure 1., and 5. • The last paragraph in your definition section has broken flow with the 1) and 2) in the middle of the sentence. Maybe consider removing these, or consider putting them into a list form. I’ve noticed this again in your first paragraph for response to unexpressed primary emotions section. Otherwise, everything else reads well! You’ve done a really great job with this chapter.
--U3190229 (discuss • contribs) 00:42, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
APA referencing, italics and formatting edit
Hey, your page is looking really great. I love all your examples they make the concepts clear to understand. I have just listed a few things below that may help:
1. Be careful you are using APA 7th edition. For example instead of Shaver, Veilleux, & Ham, 2013 you should put Shaver et al., 2013. Here is a link for APA 7th edition that may help https://www.mybib.com/blog/apa-style-7th-edition-changes
2. In the definition heading where you state "Within these descriptions there is some disagreement around 1) whether a meta-emotion should be considered an emotion of its own right or as a self-regulatory system, and 2) if meta-emotions stem from appraisal of a full emotion or an individual subcomponent of an emotion." It may read easier if you do 1 and 2 as separate dot points.
3. I think where you have citations in the middle of the sentence it breaks the flow of the sentence, maybe consider adding citations at the end and if you have multiple citations just add a semicolon. However in the rubric just note James didn't want more than 3 references per point.
4. Make sure you refer to figures within your text (see Figure 1)
5. Be mindful of using lots of italics. Italics are helpful to highlight a key concept or idea but I found it difficult when there are so many within a paragraph. Rather maybe you can highlight different terms through using dot points or for example in the facets of Meta emotion have italicise just experience, knowledge and strategies words rather than the whole phrase meta emotion experience. This may help it read better.
6. In your example Meta-emotional appraisal for shame-about-joy. I wasn't sure if half of the text was supposed to be bold? If so maybe just explain why this has been done.
I hope this feedback is useful. Your chapter really is looking great! --U3190210 (discuss • contribs) 01:06, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
Feedback Implemented 16/10 edit
Thanks to above users for giving detailed and helpful feedback. Everything suggested was implemented into the book chapter. Cheers, -Tia U3190467 (discuss • contribs) 03:52, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
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