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I have written a paragraph below that you are welcome to use about developing MT with self-talk.
The study below shows how mental toughness can be fostered in athletes through intentional self-talk. The individual's predetermined certain words that would recall later while performing. This process improved mental toughness (as measured by the mental toughness index) and their overall performance during their run. This makes sense as while being challenged its likely people experience significant self-talk through doubt. The strategy above likely interrupts this process allowing the individual to focus on their momentary performance. Increasing their self-efficacy and ability to persevere through pain.
- Cooper, K. B., Wilson, M. R., & Jones, M. I. (2020). Fast talkers? Investigating the influence of self-talk on mental toughness and finish times in 800-meter runners. Journal of Applied Sport Psychology, 1-19.
Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hello, your chapter is looking great! Just a few things I picked up on:
1. Be careful of your spacing for your referencing. For example it should be "Adam was the greatest scientist of all time" (Eve, 2013, p. 123). You need a space at the end of the sentence and the start of the brackets, and between the commmas rather than ""Adam was the greatest scientist of all time"(Eve,2013,p. 123)
2. Make sure if you have figures that you refer to them in your chapter (see Figure 1).
However, your chapter is looking good, hope this has been helpful.
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this is an insufficient chapter mainly due to lack of research review.
The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended.
Discussion of theory could be improved by relating MT to similar concepts such as resilience, grit, perseverance, hardiness, conscientiousness etc.
MT is considered almost exclusively in a sporting context. Whilst this context can make for useful case studies/examples, the topic was broader. In what other contexts might MT be useful?
Several claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills to a professional standard.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
"People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects".
Layout
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
Learning features
Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
See also and External links - use bullet-points, per Tutorial 1.
External links - include source in parentheses after the link, so a reader knows where they are heading if they click
No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.