Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Limbic system and emotion

Referencing

Wow! Your chapter is amazing! so informative! One thing though- I have noticed you have not used index referencing in your book chapter. Just a reminder APA formatting is required in psychology units :) => i.e. instead of (1) use (author, year) instead :)

u3189981 - Talk - c 02:29, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:24, 15 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Capitalisation and formatting of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created Minimal, but sufficient Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Section headings Under-developed, 1-level heading structure - develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the largest section(s). See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Basic development of key points, with some relevant citations. Some theory; lack of research. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Write using 3rd person perspective. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Not cited or presented in APA style Resources See also Remove bold Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link External links Not presented

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:24, 15 September 2020 (UTC)

Some additional feedback:

• @U3155259: I suggest adding a section that explains the limbic system and its role in emotion from an overall perspective, then move the table about "Primary structures of the limbic system" out of the Overview and into its own section, with sub-headings and expanded content for each key structure in terms of how it relates to emotion. An additional way that could be useful to communicate about this topic could be to provide a table of core emotions and explain if/how each of those emotions is enabled by the limbic system. Make sure to link the limbic structures and emotions to specific book chapters which contain more detail where available.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:37, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

image caption and reference

Checked out APA reference format, and image caption. --U3178984 (discuss • contribs) 03:55, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. Subtitle has been corrected to match the main book list of topics. This chapter should be about the LS and emotion. The general content about emotion regulation isn't relevant. If it is directly related to the LS, it could be relevant. Why was emotion regulation added to the sub-title? This created an unnecessary detour . The Conclusion doesn't mention the LS?! . This chapter is well under the maximum word count. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of theory. The main issue is that the chapter fails to provide a discipline overview of the role of the LS in emotion and consists almost entirely of tangential material. There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about emotion). Instead, remove or summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). The chapter has an unnecessary focus on brain damage. Brain damage could be used as a case study example to highlight what is known about the function of the limbic system, but it is far more important to instead a description of the role of the limbic system and its components in the experience of emotion generally, and specific types of emotion in particular. Did you consult Cannon (1927)? If not, this should be a secondary citation. Research Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of relevant research. Rather than having a separate research section, consider embedding material about the LS and emotion throughout. For example, how is situation selection related to the LS and emotion? Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills to a professional standard. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1]. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Learning features See also should use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1. See formatting style in other chapters. External links not provided . Basic use of Wikiversity links. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Ideally, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Other links can be moved to the external links section. Basic use of image(s) - but the figures are not relevant to the LS and emotion. No use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). The feature box is probably the best/most relevant content in the chapter - expand on this material. Basic use of quiz(zes). Quiz questions 1, 2, and 3 aren't relevant to topic (LS and emotion). The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. No use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Direct quotes need to be enclose in double quotation marks and include page numbers. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:25, 11 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes. Structure and content This presentation doesn't satisfactorily address the topic. There is too much focus on general emotion theory and too little focus on the role of the LS in emotion. Comments about the book chapter also larger apply to this section. The presentation is poorly structured (lack of Overview and Conclusion). The content is poorly selected (doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and research to address the topic). What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly. Communication The presentation makes very basic use of text based slides with narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is hesitant - could benefit from further practice. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was good. Visual display quality was very good. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter was not provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:30, 20 November 2020 (UTC)