Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Intuitive eating

Social contribution

Hi! Thank you for commenting on my chapter and letting me know about intuitive and mindful eating, I'm going to link both. Intuitive eating is definitely related to body image flexibility, as people high in flexibility practice intuitive eating more. I enjoyed reading your chapter and I thought the study boxes were a really good idea. For the HAES research section, I think it would benefit from a short general overview of research as well, or if those are the only two studies, info about why (like is HAES research new?). Also, APA 7 has changed how many authors to use in in-text citations, so if you have three or more now its just the first author then et al. I didn't realise until this semester! U3170940 (discuss • contribs) 01:02, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing). For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:04, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Very good Sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Author name removed - authorship is as per the edit history User page Created Description about self provided Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect links to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Section headings See earlier comment about Heading casing. Reasonably well developed 2-level heading structure. Heading levels 2 and 4 are used - instead use 2 and 3 The role of some headings could be better explained e.g., Ellyn Satter Institute Replace ampersand with "and" Check and correct capitalisation Avoid having sub-headings in the Overview and Conclusion Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Some of the key points are minimal Very good inclusion of citations Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis (APA style) Conclusion (the most important section) is not developed The plan seems to involve a reasonable balance of theory and research. Consider adding one or more case studies. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style, use: correct capitalisation the new recommended format for dois Resources 2 out of 3 internal links provided Move the external link to the External links section

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:04, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. There is an over-reliance on books and an under-reliance on psychological peer-reviewed journal articles as the basis for this chapter. This chapter is slightly over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Some relevant theories are selected, described, and explained. More emphasis on the psychological aspects of intuitive eating, based on psychological science (e.g., more about the science of intuition and the science of eating), would be helpful (e.g., this would probably be more useful than the mini-bios of dieticians/nutritionists). Research Relevant research is reasonably well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. For reviewed research, consider including sample sizes and effect sizes to help the reader to know more about the size and nature of observed differences/changes. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). More critical consideration would be appropriate e.g., the Warren et al. systematic review warrants more attention - it seems to be cautious about the evidence for intuitive eating: "The evidence base for intuitive eating is limited to date and further research is needed to examine its potential in altering eating behaviours." Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. "People" is usually a better term than "individuals". Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Almost no use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). Very good use of table(s). Very good use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes). No use of individual case studies, but the research case studies were good. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). Proofreading The chapter preparation seemed a little rushed - more proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis. Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Include dois as active hyperlinks. Social contribution ~11 logged social contributions. Some edits were minor. Only some direct links to evidence were provided. Most edits within a week of book chapter submission.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:36, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section, particularly the lack of use of psychological theory and research. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation makes basic use of theory. The presentation makes no use of research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation makes basic use of animated slides with narrated audio. Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. But some of the colour contrasts and low resolution make the slides more difficult to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is basically produced using simple tools. The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was good. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:15, 24 November 2020 (UTC)