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Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to the topic.
However, the chapter goes beyond the specific topic (i.e., HT and PWB) to cover other areas (basically nature and health), so could be improved by either focusing in a more disciplined way on HT and PWB, or negotiating a broader question.
The Overview is promising, but underdeveloped. Consider:
Developing focus questions to help guide the reader and structure the chapter.
This overall alignment between the topic/question and the content is key.
The Conclusion and some other sections are underdeveloped (consisting only of bullet-points). The Conclusion could be more focused on summarising what psychological science knows about the relationship between HT and PWB.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
This chapter provides some promising coverage of relevant theory.
Ideally, this theory could be more specific/directly related to HT (rather than to the effects of green space, gardening etc.). Alternatively, realign the question/topic to find more closely with the content.
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. A key area for improvement is expanding some of the dot points into full paragraphs.
Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
The chapter uses a basic, 1-level structure. Consider developing the main sections to include sub-headings.
Learning features
Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1 (e.g., for the case study).
Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Excellent use of image(s). Consider expanding some of the image sizes.
No use of table(s).
Good use of feature box(es).
No use of quiz(zes).
The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3].
Abbreviations
Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.).
APA style
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Figures and tables
Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
References use correct APA style.
A more comprehensive list of references for HT could probably be developed and used.
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section - this is presentation is more broadly about the effects of nature on well-being, using HT as an example. Ideally, it will drill more specifically into HT and PWB.
An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
The presentation is well structured.
Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
The presentation makes good use of theory.
The presentation makes good use of research.
The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
