Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Hope therapy

Hope therapy in cancer patients

Would be really interesting to see a case study on hope therpy in cancer patients and how it effects their rehabilitation and mental health during the treatment process. --Taylor Mamukic (discuss • contribs) 04:55, 27 August 2020 (UTC)

Hope Therapy and Mental Illness

It would be interesting to look at the effects of Hope Therapy on mental illnesses such as Depression, anxiety and stress. It would also be interesting to compare Hope Therapy to other Positive Psychology Constructs --U3202324 (discuss • contribs) 05:03, 27 August 2020 (UTC)

Comment

Hi, excellent chapter, I can see you're almost done. I just have a few editing suggestions which may help:

• You have used several great figures in your chapter, however these haven't been referenced in your text. I believe all figures which we use must be mentioned in the main body of the text, such as: See figure 1 for a visual representation of a historical story about hope.
• Your section 'What is Hope Therapy' starts with a quote from Snyder et al. A direct quote should also include a page number in the form: (Snyder et al., 2018, p. XX).
• In some places you have Hope Theory capitalised and in some places you don't. This should be consistent. There is a discussion on the UC Forum relating to this: https://uclearn.canberra.edu.au/courses/7742/discussion_topics/129717. I'd suggest that hope theory probably doesn't need to be capitalised.
• Similarly for children's hope scale this has been written with capitalisation and without.
• You also seem to be missing a reference for the children's hope scale. How do you know what circumstances it has been tested under?
• Take care with apostrophe use. I've corrected this for you in a couple of places. But "how individuals approach" is plural - it doesn't need an apostrophe. "an individual's lifestyl" does need an apostrophe, and when you're talking about something that belongs to more than one person i.e. "individuals' lifestyles" the apostrophe goes after the s.
• Is the box under Medial Orbitofrontal Cortex (mOFC) a direct quote? If so it needs quotation marks and a page reference
• Don't forget that journal titles need to be italicised in your referencing. You can do this by adding two single quotation marks (or apostrophes) around what you want italiscised. For example: Chan, K., Wong, F., & Lee, P. (2019). A Brief Hope Intervention to Increase Hope Level and Improve Well-Being in Rehabilitating Cancer Patients: A Feasibility Test. SAGE Open Nursing, 5, 237796081984438. https://doi.org/10.1177/2377960819844381 U3025324 (discuss • contribs) 10:23, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:15, 15 September 2020 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title OK Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created About me Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Use default heading formatting (e.g., avoid bold, italics, underline etc.). Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Overly complicated 3-level structure - consider simplifying. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Check grammar e.g., questions should end with question marks, remove unnecessary colons etc. Key points Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Overview - Consider adding: an image. an example or case study. Good development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations. Balance of theory and research. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Many references are incomplete. For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources See also Include source in brackets after link Move external links to external links Also link to relevant book chapters External links Use bullet-points Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:15, 15 September 2020 (UTC)

Categories

Hi, you did a great job. Try to add categories on your page.--U3178984 (discuss • contribs) 03:52, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

TED-talk video

Hey! Your chapter looks great, although I bet it is almost finished I stumbled across this video that I thought may interest you. Hope you enjoy and that it helps contribute to your book chapter. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hYchBHuwdI0. --taramaland (discuss contribs) 10:00, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Revision notes

Hi User:Jackson McNee I fixed some formatting with your first two subheadings which was them to display in the contents as bold, added some missing full stops throughout text, and fixed some grammar such as a few apostrophes.

Here's a link to review the changes I made. Hope this helps :)

--U3186080 (discuss • contribs) 18:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

Social Contribution

hey there, I was doing some last minute research and came across this article, although it is probably a bit late, i thought it might be of some interest for you :)https://www.researchgate.net/publication/308994930_Hope_Therapy_in_Depression_A_Case_Report --U3175502 (discuss • contribs) 07:37, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this chapter provides a reasonable overview of HT theory, research, and application. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory I was still left wondering, "what exactly is HT?" e.g., what does it look? Who is for? Who does it? etc. Ideally, provide more info about how hope therapy works (e.g., what's involved? how long does it take? how does it work? etc.). The case study describes a problem, but the application of HT, which would be more useful to illustrate key concepts. Re hope in general: Summarise and provide embedded links to other relevant book chapter(s) and Wikipedia article(s) about hope per se. That way, this chapter focus on hope therapy. The comparison with other therapies is somewhat helpful, but it would probably be more useful just to provide an expanded description of HT is, rather than what it isn't. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. Ideally, provide less focus on measurement tools and more focus on reviewing and synthesising research findings that address the sub-title question. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects". Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes). Grammar Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos (e.g., double spaces) and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style In general, do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Direct quotes need page numbers. Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Citations use correct APA style. References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~22 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:52, 12 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes little use of research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). 3= The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Communication No comment Production quality The video is very well produced. The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter. Audio recording quality was very good. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:49, 23 November 2020 (UTC)