Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Guilty pleasure

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:12, 19 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

Topic idea

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Hi there,
I think my topic of meta-emotion is closely linked to your topic of guilty pleasure (I'll be adding you in my "See also" section). To add to your explanation of 'what is guilty pleasure?' you could include a section explaining how guilty pleasure can be a Positive-Negative meta-emotion (ie. guilt-about-pleasure). This changes how you experience the pleasure.
Hope this helps! U3190467 (discusscontribs) 03:01, 25 August 2020 (UTC)Reply


Hi,
Errors in APA style for references. Books, journals, and encyclopedias are italicized. Please check and correct that.
Hope this helps! --U3178984 (discusscontribs) 02:15, 28 August 2020 (UTC) Hi,Reply

Making your career as a guilty pleasure

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I have come a cross interesting Ted talk on making your career as a guilty pleasure.--Grace Rphael (discusscontribs) 20:48, 6 December 2020 (UTC)Reply

Psychodynamic approach

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There is some interesting research on freud's approach to guilty pleasure developing at different stages of childhood. Could be good to explore this?--Jackson McNee (discusscontribs) 02:56, 16 September 2020 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title

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  1. Excellent

User page

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  1. Excellent - used effectively

Social contribution

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  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Section headings

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  1. Excellent
  2. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.

Key points

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  1. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the problem and what will be covered
    2. an image
    3. an example or case study
  2. Consider mentioning and linking to schadenfreude and related emotions
  3. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  5. Good use of examples/case studies.

Image

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  1. Excellent

References

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  1. Excellent

Resources

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  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:36, 19 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

Figure 1

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@U3160224: I think that Reeve (2018) should be cited in the caption for Figure 1, since it appears to be based on the Reeve grouping of 20 emotions. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:00, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Word Count

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Wow! What an amazing chapter, I am blown away by the amount of content. I noticed that your word count was at about 5,200. This is very impressive, however the [criteria] states that anything over the +10% of 4,000 words won't be marked. I'm sure this won't be a problem, but something to consider. U3189449 (discusscontribs) 07:27, 13 October 2020 (UTC)Reply


I agree an excellent chapter and great read! I thought the word count was long too but checked it and it is now under 4000 words so great job! --U3174214 (discusscontribs) 12:31, 16 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Great read

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Your chapter is great! One of the best I've seen. You've really taken your time on the detail, theres something here for everyone I feel. Thank you — Preceding unsigned comment added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]])


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Motivation_and_emotion%2FBook%2F2020%2FGuilty_pleasure&type=revision&diff=2236799&oldid=2232022[ these copyedits].
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained.
  2. The extra pages of examples were helpful, but the inclusion of more simple/brief examples of key concepts in the main text would be ideal.
  3. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
  3. When describing important research findings, consider indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good.
    2. A lot of extra words could be removed to make the written expression crisper. For example, "first coined" is redundant; "coined" can only occur once.
    3. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
    4. Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences.
    5. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1].
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is reasonably well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. Minimal use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Very good use of image(s).
    4. No use of table(s).
    5. Good use of feature box(es).
    6. No use of quiz(zes).
  4. Grammar
    1. Check and make correct use of commas.

[2].

    1. Use serial commas[3] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
    2. Check and correct use of that vs. who.
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').
  1. APA style
    1. Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis.
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    2. Figures20 and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    3. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
  1. ~20 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence
  2. Thankyou for your excellent social contributions - much appreciated! Bonus marks added  

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:31, 8 November 2020 (UTC)Reply


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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of theory.
  5. The presentation makes excellent use of research.
  6. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  7. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Excellentintonation and articulation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
  1. The video is very well produced.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used in both the name of presentation and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  4. Visual display quality was excellent.
  5. Image sources and their copyright status are provided.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  7. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:42, 23 November 2020 (UTC)Reply

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