Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Giving up goals

Suggestion

Hi there! I am loving the information that you have in your chapter already and it looks like you have some amazing articles! May I make a suggestion to look into the different types of goals, such as intrinsic and extrinsic and how they play a part? I hope this helps! :) U3169316 (discuss • contribs) 03:02, 3 September 2020 (UTC)

Hi. I noticed we have a mutual reference. Wrosch, C., Miller, G. E., Scheier, M. F., & de Pontet, S. B. (2007). Giving Up on Unattainable Goals: Benefits for Health? Personality and Social Psychology Bulletin, 33(2), 251–265. https://doi.org/10.1177/0146167206294905 Have you considered the role cortisol has on lack of motivation and the giving up on goals? This source mentions that there is a link between cortisol secretion and goal disengagement throughout the day. Even if it is not a part of your main chapter it could be an interesting case study or fun fact. --U3174214 (discuss • contribs) 03:42, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Comment

Hello! I stumbled upon this Tedtalk that you may find interesting and would possibly like to use in your external links? You've got a lot of interesting information already, but I hope this might help you out some more! Here's the link: https://www.ted.com/talks/derek_sivers_keep_your_goals_to_yourself#t-169932 --U3160224 (discuss • contribs) 05:26, 24 August 2020 (UTC)

Hey ! Just letting you know that I edited some spelling and grammar within the giving up goals paragraph ! :) --U3190016 (discuss • contribs) 11:31, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created About me Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Good - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. If editing a book chapter page, improve it directly (e.g,. don't just "suggest" - add the actual link etc.). Otherwise, make a comment on the chapter discussion page. Section headings Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Key points The suggested key points are OKish, but could be improved considerably by being less general about goal setting and more specific about the topic (giving up goals). I suggest doing a more thorough literature search about this topic and revising the plan before progressing too much further. Overview - Consider adding: focus questions an image an example or case study Expand theory and research about the target topic (i.e., giving up goals). Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? Image Not used References OK Textbook is not a peer-reviewed use - user primary sources. For APA referencing style, check and correct: alphabetical order capitalisation Resources Excellent See also Use bullet-points External links Move academic articles into References

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:51, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

Biology of goals

I am doing a hope therapy book chapter which has links goals and i found a good article about how damage to our hippocampus can affect cognitions towards achieving goals. I have linked the articles https://www-sciencedirect-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/science/article/pii/S0306452217305523?via%3Dihub --Jackson McNee (discuss • contribs) 03:37, 4 October 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. This chapter is well under the maximum word count. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended. The Overview is underdeveloped. Consider explaining the problem in more detail. An illustrative case study could be help to engage reader interest. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Overall, this chapter makes basic use of relevant theory, but in insufficient depth. Use of illustrative case studies could help to illustrative the key principles. Research Overall, this chapter makes basic use of relevant research, but in insufficient depth. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very poor and well below professional standard. UC Study Skills assistance is recommended to help improve writing skills to a professional standard. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1]. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Remove bold from headings (just use default wiki style). Learning features Use bullet-points (e.g., for the See also section, per Tutorial 1). No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Basic/No use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). No use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for most sentences is incorrect (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Replace double spaces with single spaces. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. All sentences should start with a capital letter. APA style Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Figure 2 missing? Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:54, 14 November 2020 (UTC)

Comments on resubmitted book chapter

These revisions have been reviewed. Comments:

1. The spelling, grammar, and the overall quality of written expression for original content where problems where tagged has been improved. However, there are similar problems with the quality of written expression for content that been recently added (e.g., "Humanistic psychologists has explored ..." -> "Humanistic psychologists have explored ...", there are double-spaces, over and under use of capitalisation, Americanised spelling etc.). Some very basic elements of written expression are lacking (e.g., using a capital letter to begin a sentence). Thus, the overall quality of written expression is more or less the same. Seeking professional assistance to improve the quality of written expression is strongly recommended.
2. Incentive theory material has been added to the extrinsic motivation and linked to giving up goals.
3. Expectancy theory of motivation material has been added to the extrinsic motivation and linked to giving up goals.
4. The "When should people give up their goals?" section has been slightly expanded.
5. An example has been added (Sara) to illustrate a real-world situation, but the example is not resolved (e.g., did Sara give up the goal or not? Why or why not? What were the consequences?).
6. A section about "biological factors" has been added. It may be more appropriate to label this as something like "developmental factors".
7. Sections (ideally these would have used wiki headings so they appear in the table of contents) about "implementation intentions", "fixed mindset", "self doubt", "personal control beliefs", "ways of coping", "helplessness", "Maslow's hierarchy of needs", "growth mindset", "self-efficacy theory", "fulfilling your psychological basic needs", "optimistic association", "congruence" have been added, with some citations, and linked to giving up goals. This additional content is the most substantial improvement to the chapter, mainly strengthening theory.
8. The heading structure is messy (e.g., avoid sections with one subsection).
9. The conclusion and take-home messages have been improved.
10. Figure 1 caption has been expanded

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:27, 9 December 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The content is poorly selected (doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and research to address the topic). Communication The presentation makes very basic use of text based slides with narrated audio and some images. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The slides could be improved by proofreading (e.g., inconsistent capitalisation). Production quality The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter. Audio recording quality was basic - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone. Visual display was poor. Put the slides into full-screen mode before recording. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:23, 20 November 2020 (UTC)