Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Feedback and motivation in sport

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:59, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title The subtitle was changed without consultation. So, the page has been moved to: Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Feedback and motivation in sport. User page Excellent - used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Summarised with 1 direct and 1 indirect link to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Very basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Very limited development Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References None cited Excellent Very good Good OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: formatting of issue number doi formatting Resources See also Identify more relevant (specific) links Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:59, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

Feedback suggestion

Could be worth exploring the difference between negative and positive feedback. For example how positive feedback looks to satisfy competence and autonomy whereas negative feedback motivates individuals to repair or improve their short-term performance --Jackson McNee (discuss • contribs) 22:36, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

Book suggestion

Hey! It could be a great idea to look at the point of view of former professional tennis player Andre Agassi, he has spoken multiple times across his book and interviews about the role of feedback in his career. I found it very interesting and think it could help expand your chapter! --taramaland (discuss contribs) 10:00, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. Non-peer reviewed sources are over-used. Move non-peer reviewed links into the external links section. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory The chapter could be improved by focusing more directly on feedback and sport in the initial parts of the chapter rather going into general motivational theoretical material. Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1]. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Learning features Move external links from the see also section to the external links section. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Abbreviations Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Physical Education -> physical education). More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis. Figures and tables Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Some citations are missing. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Select up to a maximum of three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point). References are not in full APA style. For example: Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~2 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:23, 8 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes excellent use of theory. The presentation makes little to no use of research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation and articulation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is very well produced. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:36, 23 November 2020 (UTC)