Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Endocannabinoid system and emotion

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Remember to move the info about yourself to your user page. ---- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:39, 19 August 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi Claireebousfield. FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing). For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:45, 27 August 2020 (UTC)

@Claireebousfield: This is a reminder to use lower-case for headings. Also, just use the default heading styles i.e., remove italics, bold etc. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:37, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Very good Sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Was listed incorrectly on main list of topics - now fixed Included description of self Add link to book chapter Social contribution Moved social contribution summary from book chapter page to user page Summarised with indirect links to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings There appears to be a risk of too much background content and too little focus on addressing the sub-title question. Use default heading styles (avoid bold, italics etc.) Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Basic development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations. Overview Limited development (can be a sign that the plan hasn't been thought through sufficiently) Focus questions provided. Conclusion No development (often a sign of a lack of overall conception about how to tackle the topic) Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Direct quotes need page numbers; even better, write in your own words to demonstrate your own understanding. Good planned covered of theory and research and excellent use of citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use full APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text - e.g., probably a more relevant image is one that illustrates how the ECS relates to emotion. Another image appears to have been deleted due to lack of copyright information. References Very good. Note in APA style. Check: correct capitalisation correct italicisation the new recommended format for dois Resources Basic, sufficient Use bullet-points Include sources in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:51, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes good use of research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Communication The presentation is fun and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective and creative use of animated slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent/Consider using greater intonation and articulation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is well produced using simple tools. The chapter title and sub-title are used in both the name of presentation and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was poor (e.g., tinny, white noise). Probably an on-board microphone was used. Consider using an external microphone. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources are provided.. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:07, 24 November 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic chapter. The Overview should be more strongly focused around the final focus question - that is the topic. The other questions are general and not of great interest - the answers can be summarised briefly, with links to further info. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Basic coverage of relevant theory is provided. However, there is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about emotion). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., remove additional bold and italics). Learning features Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1 (e.g., for the See also and External links sections). Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes), however no correct answers are indicated, hence the syntax errors. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~4 minor, last minute logged social contributions, most without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:31, 25 November 2020 (UTC)