Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Emotional schema therapy

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:34, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

@U3145017:

1. Overall, this is looking good and on the right track - so for it to develop a full draft chapter.
2. Make sure that the title and sub-title wording and casing match exactly what is listed here: Motivation and emotion/Book/2020
3. Overview
   1. Consider introducing an example or case study and perhaps adding an image. Don't provide detailed content - move it into subsequent sections.
4. Avoid overcapitalisation. So, "Emotional Schema Therapy" can be "emotional schema therapy". You could set up an abbreviation to EST and use thereafter.
5. Examples based on articles can be useful. But also consider giving some simple, everyday examples to help make the topic more accessible.
6. See also - excellent
7. Embed more interwiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles, especially for first mention of key words e.g., therapeutic relationship.
8. Cite each figure at least once in the text.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:34, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Adding visual infomation

Hi! Interesting topic you've chosen- I'd like to suggest maybe portraying information in a visualy stimulating way. This might make infomation easier to follow and will create a more engaging and interactive experience! Maybe a mind map. U3176522 (discuss • contribs) 01:56, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Citation

Hey there, good topic so far, it seems as though you need to go through and cite a lot of the information your saying refer to https://libguides.mq.edu.au/referencing/APA7thEdition for APA 7th edition to make sure your up to date with you citaiton. --Oscar3176498 (discuss • contribs) 23:42, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Title and sub-title were adjusted to match the overall table of contents. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theory is well selected, described, integrated, and explained. Research Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. A critical perspective is evident. The conclusion seems to overinterpret what appears to be mixed evidence about the efficacy of EST? Although there are no meta-analyses/systematic reviews of EST per se, consider incorporating citation of related schema therapy research reviews e.g., https://scholar.google.com/scholar?hl=en&as_sdt=0%2C5&q=emotional+schema+therapy+systematic+review&btnG= Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects". Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1]. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, per Tutorial 1. Ideally, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Other links can be moved to the external links section. Basic use of image(s). Excellent use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Figures and tables Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., check and correct capitalisation). Citations use correct APA style. References use correct APA style. Social contribution ~8 logged, last-minute, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:04, 8 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes very good use of research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is well produced using simple tools. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was OK. Some background noise. Probably an on-board microphone was used. Consider using an external microphone. Visual display quality was very good. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:03, 23 November 2020 (UTC)