Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Emotional abuse in romantic relationships

Suggestions

Hey there, really interesting topic and looks like you have done some awesome research! I may just siggest changing some of the headings to somethings a little more formal. Rather then just "Why" or "Some Stats" as the headings, maybe changing it to something like "Causes and Variables to Emotional Abuse" and "Statistics on Prevelance of Emotional Abuse". I just think this may come across a little more professional, but apart from that great work! --Sydtomcat (discuss • contribs) 11:55, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Hey, Definitely an interesting topic and an area that doesn't receive as much focus as it should. I have attached a couple of articles that I found interesting, hopefully they are helpful to you. All the best with the chapter :) https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Christine_Wekerle/publication/8399411_Predicting_Abuse_in_Adolescent_Dating_Relationships_Over_1_Year_The_Role_of_Child_Maltreatment_and_Trauma/links/554183ba0cf2718618dcb5c6.pdf http://jiv.sagepub.com/content/early/2009/05/13/0886260509334392.full.pdf--U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 20:21, 11 October 2016 (UTC)

Hello! You've done good work on this! I made some minor-ish word changes to some of your sentences to make it easier to read in some places, if you don't like my suggestions, you can revert to a previous version in the view history tab on the top right I think. Anyway. I also have a few suggestions for you.

1. In the marking criteria is says "Select up to the top three citations per point" and I think you've got more than that in some places, e.g. in the overview.
2. This is a section in the introduction that I found a bit confusing: "The idea of males being the only abusers and women being the only victims needs to be abolished, as this can make it difficult for men to seek help in prevention programs designed for women and stop women from abusing in intervention programs designed for men (Carney et al. 2007b; Hines, 2007). "
3. You first mention IPV in the Why? section, but don't explain it before hand, so I don't know what you mean. What does it stand for?
4. Again, these wordings I found confusing. in the Other- self-defense, drugs/alcohol, mental health subheading: "The most common reason for IPV by both men (50%) and women (54.5%) was due to feeling offended and/or hurt, women's (30.9% and men 18.8%) second reason was self-defense and men's (31.3% and women 16.4%) second reason was drugs or alcohol." Maybe consider taking out those brackets so it reads easier.
5. And this bit here, the wording confused me (in the same section as previous): "Langhinrichsen-Rohling et al., (2012) did a review on why men and women use IPV, from the review they reported that the reason for IPV by men and women was due to jealousy, self-defense and retaliation, additionally mean reported control being a reason for IPV. "

Good work! Hope these suggestions were more helpful than annoying. --SLDux (discuss • contribs) 09:14, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Minimal, effective Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Very good Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Key points Excellent Really interesting and good to see the balanced views about the role of gender. However, don't get too sucked down that rabbit - whilst relevant, it is not the focus of this chapter (refer back to title and sub-title). The main aspect probably not adequately covered is with regard to "why" does EB in romantic relationships happen? Overview - Consider adding: focus questions. an image. an example or case study. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Image Excellent Caption - replace colon with period (APA style) References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources See also Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link External links Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:40, 14 September 2020 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi, I just have a few quick suggestions. Perhaps takeout the first two paragraphs of the overview and put these under a introduction type topic heading. I believe the overview should just outline the focus of the chapter, so starting with “the aim of this chapter” as per the third paragraph currently.

Additionally suggest rewording 2, 3 and 4 of the focus questions to make them flow more with the content of the chapter.

I would also maybe add some additional subheadings under the table of contents to make the chapter and information more accessible and the layout clearer.

I think you’ve picked a great topic and I look forward to reading the finished chapter!U3202026 (discuss • contribs) 06:09, 5 October 2020 (UTC)

Gaslighting

I have found an interesting article about gaslighting which could be an interesting area to explore. https://search-proquest-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/docview/2244600104?rfr_id=info%3Axri%2Fsid%3Aprimo--Jackson McNee (discuss • contribs) 00:58, 7 October 2020 (UTC)

Overview vs. Introduction

@Laurenpeel: Avoid having both an overview and introduction; consider merging or renaming the Introduction. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:07, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

Examples

Try to add a title in your case study (example) session.--U3178984 (discuss • contribs) 03:31, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about abuse/IPV in general, rather than emotional abuse in romantic relationships). Instead, summarise and link to background information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus more directly on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Perhaps also consider the dark triad of personality traits, including narcissism, psychopathy, and sociopathy. Consider providing a case study which shows the development of a problem with EA in a RR which is then successfully negotiated based on the recommended take-away messages from this chapter. That would help to illustrate the key ideas in an accessible manner. A strength of this chapter is its balanced view of the role of gender. Research Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Show internal and external links as per Tutorial 1. Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). In general, do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section. Social contribution ~8 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:38, 13 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes good use of theory. The presentation makes good use of research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with practical take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality The video is produced using simple tools. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was a bit quiet and had some white noise - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone. Visual display quality was basic. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. But I'm not sure about permission for the ABS image? A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:35, 22 November 2020 (UTC)