Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Hi there, your book chapter is looking good so far however, I see limited references within your overview. You may wish to reference the literature that has informed your overview.
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Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is a promising chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The chapter could be improved by being rewritten to be more user-friendly and emphasising practical, take-home skills and messages.
Theories are well covered, integrated, and explained but I don't think appraisal theory and two-factor theory are the most relevant theories about EDR. These are general theories about emotion, but not really about emotional expression per se. Maybe just summarise these sections and link to related book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles. This will help to bring the chapter within the maximum word count and allow more room for emphasising practical, take-home messages. Social learning, social norm, and cultural context theories seem to be much more relevant/applicable.
The chapter would benefit from a more focuses Conclusion, with clearer take-home self-help messages - e.g., based on psychological science, how can I improve my emotion display?
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Learning features
Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s).
Basic use of table(s).
Very good use of feature box(es).
Very good use of quiz(zes).
Basic use of a case study. It would be good to follow the case study to find out about how Sarah learnt the EDRs of a new culture. Consider replacing Sarah with a more common Japanese name.
Grammar is problematic - grammar coaching could be beneficial.
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2].
Abbreviations
Check and correct formatting of abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.).
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed to fix typos (e.g., extra and missing spaces) and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
APA style
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis.
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section.
An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
The presentation makes basic use of theory.
The presentation makes basic use of research.
The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
A general Conclusion slide is presented, but the conclusion is avague.
What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?
The sub-title is missing in both the video title and on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio recording quality was very good.
Visual display quality was basic.
Image sources (links) are not provided.
This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement.
Why is this classified for kids?
A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
A link to the book chapter is not provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.