Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Deliberate practice and mastery

Welcome

This chapter is under development, but I would love your thoughts as the chapter progresses.

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:29, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Very good Capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Welcome moved to talk/discussion page User page Excellent - used effectively Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Very good - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Note heading casing style. Use a numbered list. Section headings Excellent Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Image Excellent Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting Resources Very good Decapitalise (use sentence casing) External links Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:29, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The main area for potential improvement is in proofreading and grammar. But this is relatively minor compared to the excellent description of theory and related research. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained. Examples/case studies are well used. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. When describing important research findings, consider indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Highlighting major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good, but some grammar tweaks and better proofreading would be ideal. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1]. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Use bullet-points (e.g., for the external links section) and numbered lists (in main body), per Tutorial 1. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. Good use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Direct quotes need page numbers. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). In general, do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al."). References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~2 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence; 2 with indirect links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:05, 11 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Narrate the title/sub-title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes little to no use of research. The presentation makes good use of practical advice, but some examples could also be helpful to illustrate the theoretical ideas. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text-based slides with narrated audio and webcam inset. Well paced. Very good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by webcam. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Production quality The video is well produced. Consider unpublishing the draft versions. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very good. Visual display quality was very good. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:09, 23 November 2020 (UTC)