Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
Promising 2-level heading structure - clearly addresses the topic
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi User:3190499, I fixed some grammar, added inline comments, restructured sentence in “How these motivation styles cultivate constructive nonconformism” with Hung, Durcikova, Lai & Lin (2011) reference.
The last paragraph of conclusion regarding directions for future research and shortcomings could benefit from rewording to read in a less colloquial manner. Here's a link to review the changes I made :) --U3186080 (discuss • contribs) 14:46, 13 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 4 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is a very good chapter on a challenging topic that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
The main area for improvement is the quality of written expression (e.g., avoiding weasel words and overly long sentences and improving the grammar).
Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made.
Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective[1].
The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Learning features
See also - Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s).
No use of table(s).
Basic use of feature box(es).
Very good use of quiz(zes).
Good/interesting use of case studies.
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly.
Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
The presentation makes good use of theory.
The presentation makes little to no use of research.
The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit.
The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio.
Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.
The video is basically produced using simple tools.
The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter.
Audio recording quality was good.
Visual display quality was basic.
A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
A link to the book chapter is provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.