Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Cognitive behaviour therapy and emotion

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:37, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Wasn't provided - I've added them Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created with incorrect name (User:U3189416-2) - has been moved to User:U3189416 Minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Add link to book chapter Social contribution Social contributions are to chapters and other aspects of the unit than the main chapter you are working on, so I've removed most of the claimed edits Summarised with indirect links to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Section headings Under-developed heading structure - develop further to focus more specifically on the chapter sub-title. The focus of this chapter is on CBT and emotion. Not on CBT per se. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Overview - Consider adding: an image. a case study. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Image References References provided, but not in APA style For full APA style, use: alphabetical order correct italicisation the new recommended format for dois Resources See also Very good External links Use bullet-points Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:37, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Conclusion - it should be possible to only read this section and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended. Note that the topic is CBT and emotion, not CBT per se. This chapter is well under the maximum word count, so there was room for more development. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Basic coverage of CBT theory is provided, but there is insufficient/limited coverage of emotion. The focus was an anxiety and depression, which is understandable given the common clinical application of CBT. But other aspects of emotion could be reasonably explored such as emotion awareness, emotion expression, and emotion regulation. A promising aspect were critical views about the limitations of CBT; this could be expanded. For example, what other treatments can it combined with in order to help manage emotion? What other theoretical perspectives may be useful? e.g., neuroscience understandings of the role of CBT in managing emotion? Did you actually consult the 1960s Beck texts? If not, these should be secondary citations. Research Some relevant research is reviewed, however more detail is needed. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic, but sufficient. Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective[1]. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Layout Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding more links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). It is unclear how the image used relates to CBT and emotion. No use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). The quiz question mentions hypochondria but this isn't explained in the chapter. Basic use of case studies or examples. More detailed about how CBT was used and how it influenced emotion would be helpful. What are the practical, take-home messages about how CBT techniques can be used to improve emotion in everyday life? Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3]. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis. Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations use correct APA style. References use correct APA style. References use a mixture of wiki style and APA style - use one or the other, not both. I suspect that a lot of these references were copied from elsewhere rather than constructed for this chapter, hence the mixture of styles. Most of the non-peer reviewed sources should probably be moved to external links. External links - add bullet points Social contribution ~1 early contribution; no engagement/contribution of note.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:39, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation due to lack of sufficient depth. The presentation is well under the maximum time limit. Structure and content This presentation is promising, but lacks sufficient depth to adequately address the topic (e.g., what is CBT? What is the evidence about its effects on different types of emotions? etc.). The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes some use of theory. The presentation makes no use of research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies. Communication The presentation is easy to follow. The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality The video production uses simple tools. The video is poorly produced and lacks the polish that comes with practice. The sub-title is missing in both the video title and on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very good/good/a bit quiet. Visual display quality was good. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:27, 20 November 2020 (UTC)