Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Brief motivational interventions for problematic alcohol use

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I can see problematic alcohol use is defined by the Australian government guidelines. Might be interesting to add in some guidelines from other countries to see if they vary significantly from the Australian ones --JulesCro (discuss • contribs) 18:19, 30 August 2020 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created Minimal, but sufficient Social contribution Summarised with indirect links to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Promising 3-level heading structure - could benefit from further development to narrow in more specifically on the topic in the sub-title. User lower-case headings even for theory names - see APA style Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Overview and Conclusion (the most important sections) have not been developed Remove or adapt generic template content. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Basic development of key points for main sections, with relevant citations. Very good coverage of theory. Limited coverage of research. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Consider including more examples/case studies. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good For full APA style, use: correct italicisation Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:16, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Social contribution

This is the first time i have come across the term "Brief motivational interventions" perhaps you could do a comparison to more traditional types of interventions for alcohol abuse for context. Cheers :)

U3145017 (discuss • contribs) 14:15, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonable chapter that successfully uses some basic psychological theory and research to help explain a practical, real-world psychological technique. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. What exactly happens in a session? Spell it out e.g., in a table or figure or bullet-point list e.g., Explain up front how long "brief" intervention is considered to be - don't keep the reader guessing. How long is each session? How many sessions? How far apart? etc. How are participants recruited to brief motivational interventions? A key reference (Carey et al., 2006) is almost 15 years old; anything more recent? More detail and elaboration about brief motivational interventions for problematic alcohol would be of more value to this chapter than the detour into alcohol education and readiness for change interventions. Research Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. Although it makes sense to focus on at-risk demographics, this chapter seems to be overly narrowly focused on university students. Is this approach also used with people from other demographics? Table 1 provides a promising summary of four studies. Include more detail e.g., the target groups, sample sizes, and characteristics of the intervention. What is the counter-evidence? e.g., studies that show no results? Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Promising use of case studies or examples. The case study could be improved by providing more detail about the nature of the intervention. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Proofreading A lot more proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Table 1 would probably read better if the rows and columns were flipped. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. Select up to a maximum of three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point). References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Shift the non-peer reviewed sources into the External links section. Social contribution A few, minor, last minute social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:09, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes good use of theory. The presentation makes basic use of research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic? The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio, with a couple of imags. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images. Production quality The video is basically produced using simple tools. The opening slide is display very quickly - too quickly to read easily. The sub-title is missing in both the video title and on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was quite quiet. Consider using an external microphone. Visual display quality was basic. Image sources but not their copyright status are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:56, 24 November 2020 (UTC)