Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Ayahuasca and emotion

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Hi there, hope your drafting is coming along well :) Below are a few interesting papers which may be useful for your topic.

Nichols, D. E. (2016). Psychedelics. Pharmacological Reviews, 68, 264–355. http://dx.doi.org/10.1124/pr.115.011478

dos Santos, R. G., Osorio, F. L., Crippa, J. A. S., & Hallak, J. E. (2016).Classical hallucinogens and neuroimaging: A systematic review of human studies: Hallucinogens and neuroimaging. Neuroscience & Biobehavioral Reviews, 71, 715-728. http://dx.doi.org/10.1016/j.neubiorev.2016.10.026

Osório, F. D. L., Sanches, R. F., Macedo, L. R., Dos Santos, R. G., Maia-de-Oliveira, J. P., Wichert-Ana, L., ... & Hallak, J. E. (2015). Antidepressant effects of a single dose of ayahuasca in patients with recurrent depression: a preliminary report. Brazilian Journal of Psychiatry, 37(1), 13-20. http://dx.doi.org/10.1590/1516-4446-2014-1496

Sanches, R. F., de Lima Osório, F., dos Santos, R. G., Macedo, L. R., Maia-de-Oliveira, J. P., Wichert-Ana, L., ... & Hallak, J. E. (2016). Antidepressant effects of a single dose of ayahuasca in patients with recurrent depression: a SPECT study. Journal of clinical psychopharmacology, 36(1), 77-81. http://dx.doi.org/10.1097/JCP.0000000000000436

--KRR267 (discuss • contribs) 04:27, 17 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Title formatting adjusted User page Created, with minimal description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence. Section headings Overly complicated incomplete 3-level structure - consider simplifying. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Include more in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Too much background info is proposed; and too little theory and research about the question (A effect on E) is proposed. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Consider positive and negative potential emotional effects. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider increasing image size from default. References Incorporate peer-reviewed academic sources about theory and research. The suggested references would probably be better as external links. Use APA style. Resources See also Also link to relevant chapters External links None presented

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 18:52, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Contribution

Hi, i've just read through your chapter and it is very interesting, i did some of my own research on Ayahuasca and found that is has a rich history with Amazonian tribes and more recently other religious communities and has been used for centruies, maybe in the background section of your chapter you can add the history, i have linked a website that may be a good start and help you think about if you want to add this :) --U3160677 (discuss • contribs) 08:00, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:55, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from reducing the background material about A and emotion as separate constructs and expanding the section about A and emotion (which matches the topic of the chapter). Be selective about the background info - unless it helps to drive the narrative forward about how A affects emotion, it is a side topic and best left out of the current chapter. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Overall, good, promising content development; just needs to be more focused/targetted - expand the "Ayahuasca's effects on emotion" section because it is the core of this topic. And reduce, especially, background info about psychological disorders unless this is going to be in some way meaningfully related to the A and emotion focus of this chapter. May be repetitive of above comment: Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study Include more APA style citations - there is a lot of content without appropriate citations. Explain theory (e.g., neuropsychological) that can help to understand the effect of A on emotion. Include more in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Image Excellent Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation Resources See also Good Include source in brackets after link (now added) External links None

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:55, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Reference and categories

Checked reference format, and the categories.--U3178984 (discuss • contribs) 03:11, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

Some 'read more' resources

Hey there, I saw your comment on my discussion page and just wanted to say thank you. I've linked your article on my page (and happy to see you've linked mine :-)). Your chapter seems to be going along great, we've both got such great topics. I recently read a book called "Listening to Ayahuasca: New Hope for Depression, Addiction, PTSD, and Anxiety" by Rachel Harris, PhD and was thinking it'd be a great link to add to your chapter- here's the link to the book, the reference is: Harris, R. (2017). Listening to Ayahuasca: New Hope for Depression, Addiction, PTSD, and Anxiety. New World Library.

All the best! --Anubhandary (discuss • contribs) 13:06, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem. This chapter is well under the maximum word count. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. More could perhaps be said about the neuropsychological aspects of ayahuasca. Also, perhaps consider the transpersonal aspects. Research Overall, this chapter provides a reasonable overview of relevant research. Several claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: It is most often not needed at all, or use section linking. "People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects". Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. Minimal use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Questions lacked direct relation to key points or take-away messages. Some research studies, but no use of case studies. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's a 1 min. explanatory video. Check and correct use of semi-colons (;) and colons (:). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Ayahuasca -> ayahuasca per w:Ayahuasca). Fix inconsistent formatting (e.g., well being vs. wellbeing etc.). Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname. References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~5 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:17, 17 November 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes excellent use of research. Very minor If there is a sample of less than 100, then decimal points in percentages don't make sense Check spelling of assessment The presentation makes appropriate use of one or more examples or case studies. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides. Well paced. Excellent/Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is very well produced. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was excellent. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Image sources and their copyright status are/not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:59, 22 November 2020 (UTC)