Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Art therapy and emotion

Social contribution

Hi, I find this topic interesting and I enjoyed reading your chapter. I think your section 'What is art therapy' would benefit from a change in sentence structure. 'Art therapy is an experiential method of treatment that involves the use of visual stimulus and creative activities, such as drawing, painting or sculpting, to help people express themselves, and to understand and examine psychological and emotional states, thus providing a therapeutic benefit for those who are experiencing psychological distress (American Art Therapy Association, 2013).' This sentence is very long and reads a bit odd as it has a lot of commas. I would suggest breaking this into two separate sentences. Lovely chapter overall though, engaging and well written. --BirdU3171984 (discuss • contribs) 09:03, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Hi, you have approached your chapter wonderfully. The layout of your chapter and the information presented is amazing. I would suggest adding a variety of pictures and possibly some quizzes/reflective questions to make it more interactive! Besides this, it is so so so good! Please feel free to check out my book chapter too https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2020/Nature_deficit_disorder and provide me with any feedback :)

U3189981 (discuss • contribs) 02:09, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Hi, interesting topic! It looks like your chapter is coming along niceley.

Maybe you could include a section about art therapy for people with disabilities. Art therapy is funded by the NDIS in Australia as an allied health service, like speech therapy, disability support, and physiotherapy. It's nationally recognised and commonly used by people with disabilities (i'm a disability worker and have taken many clients to a day of art therapy before, it's a great way for them to express themselves and connect with each other). --U3130574 (discuss • contribs) 23:30, 25 August 2020 (UTC) Luella

U3130574 (discuss • contribs) 23:22, 25 August 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created About me Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio/online profile Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Add a heading when commenting on talk/discussion pages. Section headings Well developed. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Well developed. Overview - Consider adding: focus questions. an example or case study. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Write for an international audience (i.e., avoid Australianising - we represent only 0.33% of world population). Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation doi formatting Resources Good. Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:59, 13 September 2020 (UTC)

Focus questions and see also

Hi, Really interested in the direction of your chapter! I think the focus questions could be revised to break down the content that will be covered throughout the chapter and to ensure that the subtitle question will be answered indepth. Perhaps something like, 2. What is the link between art therapy, emotions and psychological wellbeing? 3. How can art therapy be applied to psychological theory and practice? 4. What physiological effects occur during art therapy?

Additionally, can provide some links under see also, such as art therapy as well as any older book chapter pages that may be relevant. U3202026 (discuss • contribs) 06:24, 5 October 2020 (UTC)

Case study

Hi, I mentioned that the case study is hard to find as a sentence, maybe you can put in the round box.--U3178984 (discuss • contribs) 03:03, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Title adjusted to match the main book table of contents. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Greater emphasis on major reviews (like the one mentioned in the Overview) and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Ideally, the Conclusion could provide more practical, take-home self-help messages. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Use active rather than passive voice[1][2]. Layout The chapter uses a simple, 2-level structure. Learning features Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s). Basic use of table(s). Include a heading row. Basic use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags).## Check and correct use of [http://www.colonsemicolon.com/ semi-colons (;) - sometimes a colon or comma should be used instead. Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[3] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Proofreading More proofreading to fix typos would bring the quality of written expression to a higher professional standard. Use double- rather than single-quote marks for emphasis. APA style Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~8 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:16, 8 November 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent. This presentation makes creative and effective use of simple tools. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video title and open slide title varies slightly from the book chapter title - make it consistent. Audio recording quality was very good. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. Figure 6 may have violated the rights of the owner, unless permission was obtained? A copyright license for the presentation not provided. Meta-data indicates that the presentation has been made for kids, but this is really for an adult target audience. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:53, 13 November 2020 (UTC)