Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Tax evasion motivation

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

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Great layout and headings for the chapter, perhaps consider putting in a image/table in order to get full marks for the topic development. --BMPENFOLD (discusscontribs) 03:20, 1 September 2019 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

 

Title and sub-title

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  1. Content of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents
  2. Formatting has been changed to match book style.

User page

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  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter

Social contribution

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  1. Summarised with indirect links to evidence.
  2. Abbreviate summary
  3. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings

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  1. Simple, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure.

Key points

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  1. Write for an international audience. Australian material could be used a feature box/case study.
  2. Primarily use peer-reviewed academic sources.
  3. Use Australian spelling (e.g., ize words should often be ise).
  4. Avoid too much background info (e.g,. about tax evasion). Instead, summarise and provide a link to a Wikipedia article with more info. Then concentrate on addressing the chapter topic.
  5. Insufficient application psychological theory and research.
  6. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  7. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image

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  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points (e.g., TE motivation) being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References

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  1. Psychology references?
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use correct italicisation
    3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html

Resources

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  1. See also
    1. Very good
    2. Links to related book chapters e.g., see Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Honesty
    3. Links to TE motivation Wikipedia articles?
  2. External links
    1. None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:36, 29 September 2019 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. The Overview is underdeveloped, but case study and focus questions are useful.
  3. The Conclusion is promising; it could offer some more specific recommended strategies.
  4. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  5. Case studies are well used.
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The Burton et al. textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is reasonably well written.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    4. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    2. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Good use of images.
    4. Basic use of tables.
    5. Good use of feature boxes.
    6. No use of quizzes.
    7. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').
    3. Abbreviations
      1. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
  5. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
  6. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
  7. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    2. Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., do not use italics).
    3. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
      3. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A mixture of referencing styles is used; adopt one style.
      2. See new doi format.
  1. ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:36, 11 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a good presentation.
  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
  2. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  3. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  1. The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  5. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  6. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality was poor - review microphone set-up.
  4. Video recording quality was excellent.
  5. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  7. A link to the book chapter is/not provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is/not provided.
  9. A written description of the presentation is/not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:37, 17 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

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