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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
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Write for an international audience. Australian material could be used a feature box/case study.
Primarily use peer-reviewed academic sources.
Use Australian spelling (e.g., ize words should often be ise).
Avoid too much background info (e.g,. about tax evasion). Instead, summarise and provide a link to a Wikipedia article with more info. Then concentrate on addressing the chapter topic.
Insufficient application psychological theory and research.
Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.
Latest comment: 5 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
The Overview is underdeveloped, but case study and focus questions are useful.
The Conclusion is promising; it could offer some more specific recommended strategies.
For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
Layout
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Good use of images.
Basic use of tables.
Good use of feature boxes.
No use of quizzes.
Excellent use of case studies or examples.
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').
Abbreviations
Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
Spelling
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
APA style
Direct quotes need page numbers.
Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., do not use italics).
Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).
References are not in full APA style. For example:
A mixture of referencing styles is used; adopt one style.
Latest comment: 5 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
