Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Status quo bias

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28/08/2019 - NPLeach

Have you considered looking at the status quo bias in regards to social groups in high schools for your case study?


Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title

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  1. Excellent
  2. A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section.

User page

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  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter

Social contribution

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  1. 1 claimed, but no direct link to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings

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  1. Basic, 2-level heading structure
  2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.

Key points

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  1. Key points are reasonably well developed for most sections, with relevant citations.
  2. Overview - Consider adding "focus questions"
  3. Excellent case study examples, with research evidence.
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  5. Consider expanding the theoretical explanations.
  6. Conclusion - empty.
  7. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.

Image

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  1. Provided, with an APA style caption
  2. Consider enhancing figure captions to help connect the image more strongly to key points being made in the text

References

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  1. Excellent
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation - words like "of" in journal names shouldn't be capitalised

Resources

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  1. See also
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly
    3. Also link to past relevant chapters
  2. External links
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:13, 26 September 2019 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter, with useful review and integration of theory and research. However, the chapter's quality of written expression is poor.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Written expression
    1. The quality of written expression is below professional standard.
    2. Avoid repetition of text (e.g., some of the Overview is repeated later).
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Basic use of feature boxes.
    6. Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of quizzes.
    7. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
    8. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and make correct use of commas.
  5. Spelling
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
  6. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
  7. APA style
    1. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
      2. Check and correct et al. formatting.
    2. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
  1. ~7 logged, useful, social contributions, some with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:03, 12 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools.
  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little but more examples would be helpful.
  2. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  3. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  1. Well paced.
  2. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.
  1. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality was good.
  4. Video recording quality was excellent.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A very brief written description of the presentation is/not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:05, 17 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

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