Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Relationship commitment phobia

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madeline bunday

I am really interested on how you going to discuss this topic. Especially that we are in the era of social media and online usage. I would say this behaviour is so common with people who have depression or have social anxiety. I think the question that really interests me is what led people to have commitment phobia? This can really make you explore the biology and psychological process (thoughts process). I hope this gives you something to start with! Cheers!

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:11, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

@KBPrimrose: Just a reminder about this feedback. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:04, 15 October 2019 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title Excellent - I've updated the list of chapters to reflect this shorter sub-title Capitalisation corrected to sentence casing User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution Summarised with direct links to evidence. Note: Another way to add direct links to evidence: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Basic, clear development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image None References None Resources OK - have reformatted

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:11, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

Thank you

Thank for the message, it was really nice to read. I see your page is coming together nicely, it's an interesting topic and i'm sure a major obstacle for many people. I am still working on the cognitive aspects of a phobia and if I come across anything that might relate to your topic, I will let you know. All the best with your work. --U3162449 (discuss • contribs) 23:25, 17 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory A lot of theory discussed is quite general and not specific to, or directly related to, RP. The classical conditioning example strikes me as being better explained by operant conditioning. Some of the examples could be more useful if they were more tailored to relationships. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout The chapter uses a basic structure, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. ## No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of images. Basic use of tables. Basic use of feature boxes. Increase width of box for quiz questions. Basic use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Promising use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. In general, commas are overused in this chapter, but there are also instances where they should be used but aren't. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Proofreading Replace double spaces with single spaces. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers. Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Use APA style for Table captions (Figure 2 should be captioned as a table). See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. APA style references are not provided . Social contribution ~9 logged, useful, social contributions with some direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:06, 13 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, there is a lot to like about this creative and well constructed presentation. The use of the interview is highly engaging and does a great job of illustrating the key ideas from the book chapter. The presentation is under the maximum time limit, so there is also time, for example, to reinforce the key points further in the conclusion and potentially also to set the scene a little more in the Overview/Intro. Structure and content Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little (but see comment above about enhancing the top and tail). Consider adding an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of video and text. Well paced and really well acted. Great intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read (or less text or present the text on separate slides inbetween questions). The visual communication is effective. Production quality Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are provided, with appropriate acknowledgement for technical assistance. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:37, 16 November 2019 (UTC)